Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự câu, tránh lỗi từ (ví dụ: “in actual curricular activities”, “my language”) và lặp từ. Nên trả lời trực tiếp trước rồi mới nêu thêm chi tiết ngắn gọn (tối đa 3-4 câu). Sử dụng liên từ phù hợp (and, also, besides) để mạch lạc. Chú ý ngữ pháp chia động từ và danh từ số nhiều/đếm được (a part-time job).

예시: I'm a university student majoring in English. I also study Chinese because I'm interested in languages and other cultures. Besides my classes, I take part in extracurricular activities and have a part-time job.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và câu không hoàn chỉnh. Tránh câu mơ hồ như “every day semester”. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể sử dụng liên từ (because, although). Kiểm tra danh từ số nhiều và cách dùng mạo từ (a university).

예시: I study at a university in Hui where I major in English. It keeps me quite busy because I have classes, assignments and group projects, but I enjoy it because the lecturers are supportive and I learn a lot.

제안: Rút gọn và làm rõ ý: tránh lỗi từ/ cấu trúc (you everyday, sometime). Dùng linking words hợp lý (although, because, so) và nêu ví dụ cụ thể thay vì cảm xúc mơ hồ. Giữ tối đa 3 câu.

예시: Yes, it's a great place to study. Although it can be stressful at times, I enjoy the vibrant campus life because I meet inspiring classmates and join useful workshops. As a result, I've learned new skills and made good friends.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu hoàn chỉnh và có nhiều lỗi ngôn ngữ (facilitate → facilities, repetition “to me to me”, câu cuối không hoàn chỉnh). Trả lời trực tiếp: nêu rõ có muốn thay đổi gì không; nếu có, nêu 1-2 đề xuất cụ thể (ví dụ: thư viện mở rộng, thêm không gian học nhóm) với liên từ để mạch lạc.

예시: I'm generally satisfied with my university, so I wouldn't ask for major changes. If I could suggest one improvement, it would be better study facilities, for example longer library opening hours and more quiet group-study rooms.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp và từ sai (prepare → prepare-ing/prepare for, IL exam → IELTS exam, oppi → job opportunities, goal → goals). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, dùng linking words (so, because) để nối các mục tiêu, và nêu kế hoạch cụ thể (ví dụ: take IELTS in six months, apply for scholarships). Giữ ngắn gọn và rõ ràng.

예시: At the moment I'm focusing on improving my English and preparing for the IELTS exam. I'm also studying Chinese because I want to become multilingual and increase my career opportunities. Ultimately, I hope to study abroad for a master's degree.

× I'm currently a university student majoring in English language.

✓ I'm currently a university student majoring in English.

Pronoun issue: the phrase 'English language' is grammatically correct but unnatural here; 'English' is the common collocation for a major. Use the noun form that native speakers commonly use: 'majoring in English.'

× Apart from my university studies, I'm also learning Chinese because I'm really interested in my language and different culture.

✓ Apart from my university studies, I'm also learning Chinese because I'm really interested in languages and different cultures.

Preposition/noun agreement: 'my language and different culture' is incorrect and unclear. Use plural nouns 'languages' and 'cultures' for general interest. Also remove 'my' to express general interest rather than possession.

× On top of that, I take part in in actual curricular activities and have a part time.

✓ On top of that, I take part in extracurricular activities and have a part-time job.

Article and word choice errors: 'in in' is a typo, 'actual curricular' is awkward; the correct term is 'extracurricular activities.' 'Have a part time' requires hyphenation and a noun: 'part-time job.'

× I'm an English language student at university in Hui.

✓ I'm an English language student at the university in Hui.

Article error: when specifying a particular university, use the definite article 'the university.' Without it, the sentence sounds incomplete.

× To be honest, university like keep me pretty busy because I have classes, assignments, group project and even a part time job.

✓ To be honest, university life keeps me pretty busy because I have classes, assignments, group projects and even a part-time job.

Quantifier and noun form errors: 'like' should be 'life' to refer to university experience; 'keep' must agree with singular subject 'university life' so 'keeps.' Use plural 'group projects' and hyphenate 'part-time job.'

× Even so, I enjoy studying there because every day semester.

✓ Even so, I enjoy studying there because every day of the semester is rewarding.

Tense and sentence structure: original is incomplete and ungrammatical. Add 'of the semester' and a verb 'is' to complete the clause and express present general truth.

× Yes, absolutely. Since I'm involved in quite a few activities at university, I spend a lot of time there you everyday, even though it can be stressful sometime, because of excitement and delight, I have learned a lot and made some amazing people.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Since I'm involved in quite a few activities at university, I spend a lot of time there every day. Even though it can be stressful sometimes, it's been exciting and rewarding; I have learned a lot and met some amazing people.

Adverb placement and word choice: remove stray 'you,' place 'every day' correctly, change 'sometime' to 'sometimes,' and rephrase 'because of excitement and delight' to 'it's been exciting and rewarding.' Use 'met' for encountering people. Ensure sentence separation for clarity.

× Honestly, I'm quite satisfied with my university.

✓ (No correction needed)

This sentence is grammatically correct; no changes required.

× Since I'm already busy with classes, assignment, actual curricular activities, and a part time job, I don't pay much attention to the facilitate.

✓ Since I'm already busy with classes, assignments, extracurricular activities, and a part-time job, I don't pay much attention to the facilities.

Quantifier and word form errors: use plural 'assignments,' 'extracurricular activities' instead of 'actual curricular,' hyphenate 'part-time job,' and use plural 'facilities' for campus amenities.

× What matters most to me to me is having.

✓ What matters most to me is having good learning resources and support.

Incomplete sentence: original repeats 'to me' and ends abruptly. Provide a complete, specific object after 'having' to form a grammatical sentence.

× Right now, I'm focusing on improving my English and prepare for the IL exam.

✓ Right now, I'm focusing on improving my English and preparing for the IELTS exam.

Tense/form parallelism: use parallel -ing forms 'improving' and 'preparing.' Also correct 'IL' to likely 'IELTS' and maintain consistency.

× Since I'm also learning Chinese, I hope to become multilingual and expand my career oppi opportunities in the long run.

✓ Since I'm also learning Chinese, I hope to become multilingual and expand my career opportunities in the long run.

Typo/pronoun error: 'oppi' is a typo; correct to 'opportunities.' The rest of the sentence is fine.

× One of my biggest goal is to study abroad.

✓ One of my biggest goals is to study abroad.

Subject-verb and quantifier agreement: 'one of' requires plural noun 'goals.' Use 'is' with singular subject 'one,' so the correct phrase is 'One of my biggest goals is...'.'