Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors (e.g. "intermediate," "bachelor," "abroad," "in the same field"). Use linking words like "because" correctly.

예시: I am a student. I recently finished my intermediate studies in computer science, and I plan to do a bachelor's degree in the same field abroad because I want access to better resources and international job opportunities.

제안: Begin with a direct answer stating the college name and location, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and check article and preposition use ("in Karachi," not "the Karachi").

예시: I studied at NCRT college, which is located near Shara Festival in Karachi. It has a strong academic reputation: most students achieve good grades in final exams.

제안: Answer directly then give one specific benefit using linking words. Keep sentences short and correct subject-verb agreement ("it provides", "it gives"). Replace vague phrases like "too many facilities" with concrete examples.

예시: Yes, it is a very good place to study because it provides modern laboratories and career counseling. These facilities help students learn practical skills and prepare for future careers.

제안: Start with a clear statement of whether you'd like changes, then give one or two specific improvements using correct vocabulary (e.g. "sports ground", "facilities", "modernize"). Avoid repetition and unclear verbs like "translate".

예시: Yes, I would like some improvements. For example, the sports ground is in poor condition, so I would renovate it and install modern equipment and better changing rooms.

제안: Provide a clear sequence of plans with correct grammar and precise vocabulary. Use linking words ("first," "then," "after that"). Remove unrelated or unclear phrases (e.g. "offended my future friend", "same food").

예시: First, I plan to pursue a bachelor's degree abroad in Springfield. Then I hope to complete a master's degree in the same field in another country, and afterward I aim to find a good job in computer science.

× Yes absolutely is a very good place to study and it's provide the too many facilities to the children and it's gives you more opportunity and the chances to get more aware about your subject and get learn more skills which creates benefits for you in your life and your career.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to study and it provides many facilities to the students. It gives you more opportunities to become more aware of your subject and to learn skills that will benefit you in your life and career.

Multiple third-person singular verb errors: 'is' lacked subject 'it', 'provide' should be 'provides', 'gives' should agree with singular subject 'it'. Also other grammar issues were addressed (article use, pluralization, word choice). Suggestion: Ensure verbs that refer to singular subjects add -s (it provides, it gives) and simplify long sentences into shorter clauses for clarity.

× Majority of students get the good result from there.

✓ The majority of students get good results from there.

Count and article: 'Majority' as a noun phrase usually takes the definite article 'the'. 'Result' should be plural 'results' to match 'students' and general meaning. Suggestion: Use 'the majority of' + plural noun and match noun number (results).

× I am a student, recently I completed my intermediate in computer science and now I'm planning to do my bachelor in same field and abroad in another country.

✓ I am a student. Recently I completed my intermediate studies in computer science, and now I'm planning to do my bachelor's in the same field abroad.

Preposition and phrase errors: 'in same field and abroad in another country' is redundant; use 'in the same field abroad'. 'Do my bachelor' should be 'do my bachelor's' or 'pursue a bachelor's degree'. Suggestion: Use 'in' for fields of study ('in computer science'), 'abroad' without 'in another country', and include articles ('the same field', 'a bachelor's degree').

× The college college name is NCRT and it is located near Shara Festival in the Karachi.

✓ The college's name is NCRT and it is located near the Shara Festival in Karachi.

Article and repetition errors: 'college college name' is duplicated; use the possessive or 'the college name'. 'the Karachi' is incorrect—city names generally do not use 'the'. Use 'the Shara Festival' if the festival is definite. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, use possessive or 'the name of the college', and drop 'the' before city names.

× It is a very good college and it's very famous for the result and the students.

✓ It is a very good college and it is very famous for its results and students.

Possessive adjective missing: 'for the result and the students' should be 'for its results and students' to show the college's reputation. Also 'it's' expanded to 'it is' for formality. Suggestion: Use possessive pronouns to link institutions to their outcomes ('its results').

× I completed my intermediate form.

✓ I completed my intermediate studies.

Wrong noun and form: 'form' is incorrect here; use 'studies' or 'intermediate level'. Tense is past correctly used, but word choice is wrong. Suggestion: Use 'completed my intermediate studies' or 'completed my intermediate level education'.

× Because of more, I want to avail more resources and opportunities in my career.

✓ I want to access more resources and opportunities for my career.

Incorrect phrase 'Because of more' and verb collocation 'avail more resources' is awkward; 'avail' is usually reflexive ('avail myself of') or better 'access'. Also preposition 'in my career' -> 'for my career'. Suggestion: Use 'access' or 'avail myself of' and correct preposition.

× Is there some more fun things I would like to change and the the things like the facility, different sports, the sports ground is a very in the worst condition and there's a little bit facilities and I would translate translate sport ground into the modern equipped ground.

✓ There are some things I would like to change, such as facilities and sports. The sports ground is in very poor condition and there are few facilities. I would convert the sports ground into a modern, well-equipped ground.

Conjunction and sentence structure issues: Original mixes question form and statement, repeats words, incorrect conjunctions. 'Is there some more fun things' is wrong; should be declarative 'There are some things'. 'Very in the worst condition' is incorrect collocation; use 'in very poor condition'. 'a little bit facilities' -> 'few facilities'. 'translate translate' duplicate. Suggestion: Use clear connectors like 'such as', keep declarative sentences for statements, and use correct collocations ('few facilities', 'well-equipped').

× I have some offended my future friend just like as I want to do my bachelor in abroad in Springfield and I want and after that I want to complete my master and same food in another country and after that I want to avail good job in my field.

✓ I have plans for my future: I want to do my bachelor's abroad in Springfield, then complete my master's in another country, and afterwards find a good job in my field.

Tense and word choice errors: 'I have some offended my future friend' is nonsensical. 'do my bachelor in abroad' should be 'do my bachelor's abroad'. 'same food' is incorrect; likely 'same' or 'study' intended. 'avail good job' awkward; use 'find a good job'. Suggestion: Use clear phrases 'I have plans', sequence with 'then' or 'afterwards', and correct collocations ('pursue a bachelor's', 'find a job').