Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğrudan ve bilgilendirici, fakat dilbilgisi hataları, tekrarlar ve akıcılık eksikliği var. Cümleleri daha doğal hale getirmek için artikelleri ve zamanları düzeltin (ör. 'I'm a student', 'I'm studying at high school' yerine 'I'm in high school'). Gereksiz tekrarları azaltın ve maksimum beş cümlede net bir konu cümlesi + 1-2 destekleyici detay verin. Bağlaçlar (for example, and, because) kullanarak akışı iyileştirin.

예시: I'm a high school student and I'm not working at the moment. I study subjects such as history, geography and mathematics, and my favourite is maths because I enjoy solving problems. I'm graduating this year and I plan to go to university next year to continue my studies.

제안: Cümle yapıları karışık ve bazı kelimeler yanlış kullanılmış (ör. 'college' yerine 'school', 'familiar' gereksiz). Cevabı doğrudan başlatın ('I study at ...') ve ardından okulun özelliklerini kısa ve açık şekilde verin (büyüklük, atmosfer, neden sevdiğiniz). Gerektiğinde bağlaçlarla mantıksal bağ kurun.

예시: I study at Antonian High School, which is in my hometown. It's a small school, but I like it because the teachers know us well and the atmosphere is friendly. For those reasons, I feel comfortable learning there.

제안: Cevap olumlu ama çok tekrar ve belirsizlik içeriyor; bazı ifadeler anlaşılmaz ('so she so command'). Daha net ve öz olun: doğrudan görüşünüzü belirten bir konu cümlesi kurun, sonra 1-2 neden verin (ör. öğretmenler, tesisler). Uygun kelime seçimi ve doğru kelime sırası önemli.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to study because the teachers are supportive and classes are well organised. Also, the school offers useful resources like a small library and computer access, which helps me learn better.

제안: Fikirler açık ama ifadeniz dağınık; gereksiz tekrarlar ve belirsiz kelimeler ('we are always cooling') var. Değişiklik talebinizi net bir konu cümlesiyle ifade edin ve ardından nedenlerini mantıklı şekilde sıralayın. Somut öneriler verin (ör. bahçe, dinlenme alanı, spor alanı).

예시: Yes, I would like the school to add a garden or outdoor space. This would give students a place to relax and meet friends during breaks, and it could also be used for outdoor activities and sports.

제안: Amaçlarınız net, fakat dilbilgisi ve kelime kullanımı düzeltilebilir ('an IT manager', 'get into university'). Neden yurt dışında okumak istediğinizi kısa ve ikna edici sebeplerle destekleyin. Ayrıca spesifik bir üniversite adı verirken dikkatli olun; 'for example' gibi bağlaçlarla ekleyin.

예시: I want to become an IT manager, so my plan is to go to university. I hope to study in London because universities there offer strong computer networks and advanced technology programs; for example, I would like to apply to King's College London or a similar university.

× I'm student.

✓ I'm a student.

The noun 'student' requires an article; without it the sentence is ungrammatical. Add the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun. Suggestion: use 'a' for one unspecified student: 'I'm a student.'

× I'm not working yet.

✓ I'm not working yet.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in present continuous to indicate current state. No change needed. Keep as is to express that the student is not employed at the moment.

× I'm schooling in high school.

✓ I'm in high school.

The verb 'schooling' is not used this way in English; we say 'I'm in high school' or 'I'm attending high school.' Use 'in' with the level of education: 'I'm in high school.'

× I'm taking subjects like history, geography, mathematics, uh, like umm, geometry.

✓ I'm taking subjects like history, geography and mathematics, including geometry.

Use 'and' to join the final items in a list (coordinating conjunction) and 'including' is better for specifying a subset. Avoid repeated filler words. Suggestion: 'history, geography and mathematics, including geometry.'

× And my favorite subject is maths actually.

✓ And my favorite subject is math.

Use 'math' (American) or 'maths' (British) consistently; 'actually' is unnecessary. Also 'subject' is singular so 'math' is correct. Suggestion: 'My favorite subject is math.'

× And I'm gonna graduate this year and I'm gonna go to university.

✓ I'm going to graduate this year and I'm going to go to university.

Informal 'gonna' should be replaced with 'going to' in formal/clear speech. Use present continuous with future meaning is also acceptable: 'I'm graduating this year and will go to university.'

× Thank you.

✓ Thank you.

This is an interjection and acceptable as a complete utterance. No correction needed.

× I'm studying it familiar Antonian High School, and it's really my hometown.

✓ I'm studying at Familiar Antonian High School, and it's in my hometown.

Use preposition 'at' for institutions and correct word order/capitalization for the school name. 'It's really my hometown' is unnatural; use 'it's in my hometown.'

× And yeah, this is not a big school, but it's a college.

✓ It's not a big school, but it's a college.

Redundant 'and yeah' removed for clarity. The sentence is otherwise acceptable; keep 'college' only if the institution is indeed one. Suggestion: ensure accurate term: ' school' vs 'college.'

× But it's actually enough for me because this is like a I'm learning everything in there.

✓ But it's actually enough for me because I'm able to learn everything there.

Original has misordered and extraneous words ('a' before 'I'm', 'in there'). Use 'able to learn' or 'I learn everything there.' Remove filler 'like.'

× So this is kind of great for me.

✓ So this is kind of great for me.

This sentence is acceptable colloquially. No change needed.

× I love schooling in.

✓ I love studying there.

Replace 'schooling in' with 'studying there' and place 'there' after the verb. Suggestion: 'I love studying there.'

× Yeah, it's good place to study and I love studying in there, you know, schooling or something.

✓ Yeah, it's a good place to study and I love studying there.

Add indefinite article 'a' before 'good place' and replace 'studying in there' with 'studying there.' Remove fillers 'you know, schooling or something.'

× I love so she so command with these peoples.

✓ I get along well with these people.

Original uses incorrect pronouns and forms: 'so she so command' is unintelligible and 'peoples' is wrong (plural 'people'). Use the phrase 'get along well with' to express good relations. 'People' is the correct plural.

× This is so public funded area and I love my school and yeah, it's good place to study.

✓ This is a publicly funded area and I love my school and, yeah, it's a good place to study.

Use adverb 'publicly funded' not adjective 'public funded'; add 'a' before 'good place.' Commas improve flow.

× It's so beneficial.

✓ It's very beneficial.

'So' can be used colloquially but 'very' is clearer in formal responses. No grammatical error severe; this is a style suggestion.

× 'cause we don't even have a garden in our school sometimes.

✓ because we don't even have a garden at our school sometimes.

Use 'at' with 'school' when referring to location; 'in our school' is acceptable for inside but 'have a garden at our school' is more natural. Also expand ' 'cause' to 'because.'

× Yeah, we are always cooling, but it's not that enough for us.

✓ Yeah, we are always cooling, but it's not enough for us.

Remove 'that' before 'enough.' Also 'always cooling' is unclear—if meant 'it's always hot' or 'we are always crowded' clarify. Suggestion: replace 'cooling' with intended verb.

× We need our, we need to sociable to, I mean find new people and meet with them to play games.

✓ We need a place to be sociable, to meet new people and play games with them.

Original has broken structure and incorrect forms: 'to sociable' should be 'to be sociable' or 'to socialize'; 'meet with them' better as 'meet them.' Reorder for clarity.

× So we need, I think, garden.

✓ So I think we need a garden.

Place subject 'I think' before the clause or use it parenthetically: 'I think we need a garden.' Add article 'a' before 'garden.'

× I wanna be a IT manager, so first I have to get in university.

✓ I want to be an IT manager, so first I have to get into university.

Use 'an' before vowel-sound initialism 'IT.' Replace 'get in university' with 'get into university.' Also replace informal 'wanna' with 'want to.'

× I wanna get in university in London, not in Turkey.

✓ I want to get into a university in London, not in Turkey.

Use 'into a university' and include article 'a.' Replace 'wanna' with 'want to.'

× But I think the network is really great in here, more great technologies.

✓ But I think the networking and technology are better there.

Original is ungrammatical and vague. Use 'networking and technology' or 'the network and technology are better there.' 'In here' should be 'there' when comparing to London.

× So I wanna be studying in London, like King's College or something.

✓ So I want to study in London, at a place like King's College.

Use 'want to study' instead of 'wanna be studying' for clear future intention and 'at a place like' to reference institutions. Use article 'a' before 'place.'

× Thank you.

✓ Thank you.

Acceptable as a closing interjection; no change needed.