Study— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接且自然，但句子可以更精练并加一点细节来显得更具体。注意不要重复“right now”與現在時態過度冗餘，可在一句話內加入学习阶段或喜爱的原因以丰富内容。

예시: I'm a student majoring in Art Management because I'm passionate about how art and business intersect. Currently I'm in my third year, where I focus on arts administration and curatorial practice.

제안: 回答有地点和评价，但语言有重复（modern city / scenery and environment）且不够具体。建议给出一两项具体特点或例子（如交通、文化场所或校园环境），并用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I study in Shanghai, a bustling, modern city in China. It impresses me with its vibrant cultural scene and easy public transport, which make getting to galleries and museums very convenient.

제안: 回答点明优点但有重复（big city / many），缺少具体细节和连接词。建议举例说明哪些学习资源或工作机会，并用连词使结构顺畅。

예시: Yes, Shanghai is a great place to study because it has abundant resources such as university libraries, art institutes, and numerous internships at galleries and cultural organizations, which help students gain practical experience.

제안: 观点明确且相关，但句子有些冗长及重复（fascinating or appealing / especially for art）。建议简化表达并加入具体建议（例如增加公共展示空间或社区项目），用连接词提高流畅性。

예시: Yes. I would like to see more public art exhibitions and community art festivals in Shanghai because they would create a lively atmosphere and make contemporary art more accessible to local residents.

제안: 目标清晰但表达有语法问题（apply for a master degree → apply for a master's degree；‘be more pleased to join’不自然）。建议使用更自然的结构，说明时间线和具体方向（专业或职业目标）。

예시: After I graduate, I plan to apply for a master's degree in arts management and then either join university art clubs to gain leadership experience or work in art galleries to build curatorial and exhibition skills.

× I'm a student right now and I major in art management and I really love it.

✓ I'm a student right now and I major in art management, and I really love it.

句子中缺少连接两个并列分句的逗号，会影响句子流畅性与结构清晰。建议在“art management”和“and”之间加逗号，保持并列分句的正确标点和节奏感。

× I study in Shanghai, which is a modern city in China, and the scenery and environment of Shanghai is really impressive.

✓ I study in Shanghai, which is a modern city in China, and the scenery and environment of Shanghai are really impressive.

主语“the scenery and environment”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”。原句用单数“is”导致主谓不一致。建议注意复合主语时动词的数。

× Yes, because it's a very big city, so in Shanghai there are many study resources and also it offers many job opportunities to people.

✓ Yes, because it's a very big city, so in Shanghai there are many study resources and it also offers many job opportunities to people.

句子逻辑上有并列结构，“there are many...”与“it also offers...”并列时保持主语与谓语对应。将“also”放在“it”之后使语序更自然。该处未涉及名词单复数错，但语序需调整以符合英语习惯。

× Yes, I want to see more art exhibitions or art festivals in Shanghai because they can build a very fascinating or appealing atmosphere, especially for art, so people can enjoy them.

✓ Yes, I want to see more art exhibitions and art festivals in Shanghai because they can create a very fascinating and appealing atmosphere for art, so people can enjoy them.

用词更准确：将“build”换成更常用的搭配“create”；并将“or”改为“and”以表示两类活动都希望看到；连接词与形容词间重复“or/and”应一致。保持动词形式“can create”为正确结构。

× In the future, I want to apply for a master degree after graduating from my school, and then I will be more pleased to join the art clubs or work in the arts galleries.

✓ In the future, I want to apply for a master's degree after graduating from my school, and then I would be more pleased to join art clubs or work in art galleries.

“master degree”应为“master's degree”或“a master's degree”；“art clubs/galleries”通常不加定冠词“the”或“the arts galleries”，且“arts galleries”不自然，改为“art galleries”。将“will be more pleased”改为更礼貌的“would be more pleased”与“want to apply”这种意愿语气更搭配。