Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 質問にはまず「Yes, I did.」と直接答え、その後に具体的な活動を説明してください。「music craft」や「my formula」は不自然なので、例えば「music lessons」や「my family」を使います。また、「every day hear it」は「we listened to music every day」のように正しい文にしましょう。理由や経験を1つ加え、2～3文で明確に答えるとよいです。

예시: Yes, I did. I took music lessons when I was a child because my family loved music. We listened to music every day, so I became interested in learning to play the piano.

제안: 最初に「Yes, I think they should.」と意見を明確に述べ、その理由を正しい文法で説明してください。「different things is」は「trying different things is」、「drawn paper」や「exam past the exam」はこの文脈では意味が不明確なので避けましょう。さらに、具体例と結果を linking words（because, for example, as a result）でつなぐと、内容がより自然で効果的になります。

예시: Yes, I think people should try different activities whenever they can. It helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries painting or a team sport may find a talent or hobby they really enjoy.

× Well yes I heard my opportunity is a music craft because I like music and my formula likes music every day hear it.

✓ Well, yes. I had an opportunity to take part in a music-related activity because I liked music.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the past tense had is needed instead of the present-tense form is. Use the past tense when describing an opportunity that existed during childhood.

× Well yes I heard my opportunity is a music craft because I like music and my formula likes music every day hear it.

✓ Well, yes. I had an opportunity to take part in a music-related activity because I liked music, and my family liked listening to it every day.

After the verb like, use a gerund with the -ing form when referring to an activity: liked listening. Avoid using the base form hear directly after liked.

× Yes, they can because different things is drawn paper and for example one craft activity event or exam past the exam, yeah, like that.

✓ Yes, they should, because different things are interesting. For example, they can try a craft activity or take an exam.

The plural subject things requires the plural verb are, not is. Always check whether the subject is singular or plural before choosing the verb.

× Yes, they can because different things is drawn paper and for example one craft activity event or exam past the exam, yeah, like that.

✓ Yes, they should, because people should try different activities. For example, they can try a craft activity or take an exam.

The question asks what people should do, so should is the most appropriate modal verb for giving advice. Can expresses ability or possibility, not a recommendation.

× Yes, they can because different things is drawn paper and for example one craft activity event or exam past the exam, yeah, like that.

✓ Yes, they should try different activities because this can help them discover new interests. For example, they can try a craft activity or take an exam.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected ideas. Use a clear subject and verb in each clause, and connect the example to the main answer with a complete sentence.