Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the past tense: use “I didn’t have many opportunities” instead of “I don’t have any opportunity.” Correct the phrase “take participate” to “take part” or “participate.” Avoid repetition and the unnecessary ending “And yes, yes, that’s it.” Add one specific example of an activity your parents did not allow you to try, and use a linking word such as “because” or “for example” to make the answer more coherent.

예시: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child because my parents were quite strict. For example, they didn’t allow me to join sports clubs or attend after-school classes. As a result, I mostly stayed at home and focused on my studies.

제안: State your opinion more naturally with “Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities.” Avoid repeating “do different things” and remove “Just like,” which is not used correctly here. Use parallel structures such as “dancing, cooking, and driving,” and replace “enhance their ability” with the more precise “develop their skills.” Add a clear reason and a specific result, while keeping the answer to three or four sentences.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. For example, they might learn to cook, play a sport, or take up dancing. Trying new things can make people more confident and help them discover their interests and develop useful skills.

× No, I don't have any opportunity to take part in new activities as a child because my parents are very strict.

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because my parents were very strict.

The question asks about your childhood, so you should use the past tense. Change don't have to didn't have and are to were. The plural form opportunities is also more natural when referring to several possible chances.

× They don't allow me to take participate.

✓ They didn't allow me to participate.

This sentence refers to a past situation, so don't allow should be changed to didn't allow. Participate is a complete verb and should not be preceded by take. Use participate or take part, but not take participate.

× Yes, I think that we should do different things as they can.

✓ Yes, I think that we should do as many different things as we can.

The correct comparison structure is as many + plural countable noun + as. Therefore, use as many different things as we can to express the maximum number of activities people are able to try.

× Just like I also like to do different things and activities like dancing, cooking, driving, etcetera.

✓ For example, I also like doing different things and activities, such as dancing, cooking, and driving.

Just like does not correctly introduce this example. Use For example or For instance instead. Also, after like, the -ing form is natural when describing activities you enjoy. Such as is more appropriate than like before a list of examples.

× And people should also should do different things.

✓ People should also do different things.

A modal verb such as should must be followed by the base form of the verb, and it should not be repeated. Use should do, not should should do. Also, beginning the sentence directly with People makes the answer more concise.

× It can help them to be confident, explore more and enhance their ability.

✓ It can help them become more confident, explore more, and enhance their abilities.

The pronoun them refers to multiple people, and each person may develop several abilities. Therefore, the plural form abilities is more appropriate. The parallel structure help them become, explore, and enhance also makes the list clearer.