Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then describe two activities using accurate past-tense and natural collocations. Avoid repetition, such as “I went to ballet since I'm going to ballet,” and replace unnatural phrases like “drive lots of hobbies” with “try different hobbies.” Use “I have taken ballet lessons since I was five” for an activity that continues, or “I took ballet lessons from the age of five” for a past activity. Add a specific result, such as which activity you preferred and why.

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. I took ballet lessons from the age of five with my best friend, and I also played tennis for a few years. Trying these activities helped me discover that I preferred tennis because I enjoyed playing competitively.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with one complete, specific example. Avoid the absolute phrase “try everything”; “try a wide range of activities” sounds more natural and realistic. Correct the grammar in “you cannot see which what you enjoy” and “what you desire to persuade and like.” The answer is unfinished, so complete the painting example and explain what you learned or how you benefited from trying it.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a wide range of activities, especially when they are young. This helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For instance, I had never tried painting before, but I started recently and found it very relaxing. As a result, I now paint in my free time.

× I went to ballet since I'm going to ballet since I was five with my best friend.

✓ I have been taking ballet lessons with my best friend since I was five.

The original sentence incorrectly repeats the idea of going to ballet and uses the present continuous form 'I'm going' with 'since'. For an activity that began in the past and continues until now, use the present perfect continuous: 'have been taking'. 'Taking ballet lessons' is also the natural expression.

× I went to tennis, so I had the ability to drive lots of hobbies and see which I liked the most.

✓ I also played tennis, so I had the opportunity to try many hobbies and see which ones I liked most.

The phrase 'drive lots of hobbies' does not form a meaningful grammatical structure in this context. The natural structure is 'have the opportunity to try hobbies'. Also, use 'played tennis' rather than 'went to tennis' when describing the sport you did.

× Because without trying you cannot see which what you enjoy the most and what you desire to persuade and like.

✓ Because, without trying different things, you cannot see what you enjoy most or what you would like to pursue.

The words 'which' and 'what' cannot be used together in the phrase 'which what'. Use 'what' to introduce an indirect question about an unspecified thing. The verb 'persuade' is also not appropriate here; 'pursue' means to continue doing or developing an interest.

× For example, I didn't try painting, but now I paint and I.

✓ For example, I did not try painting as a child, but I paint now, and I enjoy it.

The sentence ends with the incomplete phrase 'and I', which has a subject but no completed verb phrase or idea. Add a complete clause, such as 'I enjoy it', to finish the sentence.

× For example, I didn't try painting, but now I paint and I.

✓ For example, I did not try painting as a child, but I paint now, and I enjoy it.

The final coordination is incomplete: 'but now I paint and I' does not contain a complete second idea. Each clause joined by 'and' should have a complete structure, such as subject plus verb and any necessary complement.