Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本切题，也提供了具体活动，但表达不够自然且句子过长。应将“a lot of opportunity”改为“many opportunities”，将“try to join”简化为“take part in”，并使用过去时保持一致，例如“helped me improve”。“personal developments”应改为不可数名词“personal development”。建议用“例如”补充一项具体活动及其结果，并避免重复使用“a lot of”。

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my parents encouraged me to join outdoor activities and leadership workshops at school. These experiences helped me become more confident and improve my communication skills.

제안: 观点明确，也给出了原因，但回答在最后被截断，影响完整性和连贯性。注意主谓一致：“doing a wide range of activities helps”；“discover what they really enjoyed”应改为“discover what they really enjoy”，因为这里表达普遍观点。可以使用“However”说明不必尝试所有事情，并加入具体例子，使答案更自然、更有说服力。

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, although they do not have to try everything. By exploring different hobbies or jobs, they can gain valuable experience and discover what they really enjoy. For instance, someone who tries volunteering may realize that they are interested in working with children.

× Certainly, my parents and my teachers gave me a lot of opportunity to try to join a lot of outdoor activities or some leadership workshop which can help me to improve my personal developments and my personal skills then I will use it in the future.

✓ Certainly, my parents and teachers gave me a lot of opportunities to take part in outdoor activities and leadership workshops that could help me improve my personal development and skills, which I would use in the future.

“a lot of”后面接可数名词时，名词通常要用复数形式，所以应改为“opportunities”。“some”后面的可数名词也应使用复数，因此“workshop”改为“workshops”。另外，“personal development”通常作为不可数名词使用，不需要加-s。

× Certainly, my parents and my teachers gave me a lot of opportunity to try to join a lot of outdoor activities or some leadership workshop which can help me to improve my personal developments and my personal skills then I will use it in the future.

✓ Certainly, my parents and teachers gave me a lot of opportunities to take part in outdoor activities and leadership workshops that could help me improve my personal development and skills, which I would use in the future.

问题描述的是童年时期的经历，主要时态是过去时。因此，“can”应改为过去形式“could”，“will”应改为过去形式“would”，以保持全句的时间一致。

× Certainly, my parents and my teachers gave me a lot of opportunity to try to join a lot of outdoor activities or some leadership workshop which can help me to improve my personal developments and my personal skills then I will use it in the future.

✓ Certainly, my parents and teachers gave me a lot of opportunities to take part in outdoor activities and leadership workshops that could help me improve my personal development and skills, which I would use in the future.

“personal development and skills”包含两个内容，属于复数概念，所以后面不能用单数代词“it”，应使用复数代词“them”。不过为了使句子更自然，这里将相关内容改写为“skills, which I would use”。

× people should try many different types of things and even jobs because doing a wide range of activities help them gain a lot of experience and discover what they really enjoyed.

✓ People should try many different types of things and even jobs because doing a wide range of activities helps them gain a lot of experience and discover what they really enjoyed.

“doing a wide range of activities”是一个动名词短语，在句中作主语，整体看作单数，所以谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“helps”，不能使用“help”。

× people should try many different types of things and even jobs because doing a wide range of activities help them gain a lot of experience and discover what they really enjoyed.

✓ People should try many different types of things and even jobs because doing a wide range of activities helps them gain a lot of experience and discover what they really enjoy.

这里表达的是人们通常能够发现自己喜欢什么，是一般事实，不是过去某一次的经历。因此“enjoyed”应改为一般现在时“enjoy”，与前面的“should try”和“helps”保持时态一致。

× So trying in different

✓ So, trying different things can help people discover what they really enjoy.

“So trying in different”只是一个不完整的短语，缺少谓语动词，不能独立构成完整句子。可以加入“can help”作为谓语，并补充完整的宾语和意思。

× So trying in different

✓ So, trying different things can help people discover what they really enjoy.

“try”表示尝试不同的事物时，后面直接接宾语，不需要介词“in”。因此应说“try different things”，而不是“trying in different”。