Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use correct verb forms and prepositions. Say “my parents taught me to cycle” rather than “taught me about cycling,” and use the past tense “took me” instead of “bring me.” Also, say “ride in the mountains” rather than “riding in the mountain.” Add one specific detail about how you felt or what you learned to make the answer more developed and natural.

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my parents taught me to cycle, and they often took me riding in the mountains. I really enjoyed being outdoors, and cycling helped me become more confident and independent.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific reason and example. Correct the grammar in “someone never tried to hiked” and avoid the unclear phrase “when they enter it.” Use natural expressions such as “people who have never tried hiking” and “being in nature can help them relax.” Use linking words such as “for example” and “as a result” to make your ideas easier to follow.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this can help them discover new interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who has never tried hiking might find it enjoyable and relaxing. As a result, they may become more confident and spend more time outdoors.

× As a child my parents taught me about cycling because they always bring me out to riding in the mountain.

✓ As a child, my parents taught me about cycling because they always brought me out to ride in the mountains.

The sentence describes repeated actions in the past, so bring should be changed to the past-tense form brought. When the sentence refers to a completed past period such as childhood, keep the relevant verbs in the past tense.

× As a child my parents taught me about cycling because they always bring me out to riding in the mountain.

✓ As a child, my parents taught me about cycling because they always brought me out to ride in the mountains.

After bring someone out to, use the base form of the verb: to ride, not to riding. Review verb patterns such as help someone do something and bring someone to do something.

× As a child my parents taught me about cycling because they always bring me out to riding in the mountain.

✓ As a child, my parents taught me about cycling because they always brought me out to ride in the mountains.

The phrase in the mountains is the natural plural expression for a mountainous area. Use the plural form when referring to a mountain range or a general area containing multiple mountains.

× I think they should because new activities allow them to enjoy a new experience such as someone never tried to hiked.

✓ I think they should because new activities allow them to enjoy new experiences, such as activities that they have never tried before.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and incorrectly formed comparison after such as. Use a complete relative clause, such as activities that they have never tried before, to connect the example clearly to the main sentence.

× When they enter it, they will feel relaxed with environment and enjoy activities.

✓ When they try them, they will feel relaxed in the new environment and enjoy the activities.

In English, we normally say feel relaxed in an environment, not feel relaxed with an environment. Learn common adjective-and-preposition combinations, such as interested in, comfortable in, and relaxed in.

× When they enter it, they will feel relaxed with environment and enjoy activities.

✓ When they try them, they will feel relaxed in the new environment and enjoy the activities.

Environment is a singular countable noun in this context, so it needs a determiner. The definite article the is used because the sentence refers to the specific environment created by the new activity.