Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答有直接回应，也提到了钢琴和学校活动，但存在明显的词汇和语法问题。“piano license”应改为“piano lessons”或“a piano course”；“money activities”应该是“many activities”或具体说明活动内容。第二句的“When I was a child”重复且语序不完整。建议使用“具体活动+原因或收获”的结构，并用“Besides”连接补充信息。

예시: Yes, I did. My parents enrolled me in piano lessons when I was young, and I also took part in many activities at school. For example, I joined a basketball club, which helped me become more confident and work better with others.

제안: 回答立场明确，但表达不自然，且缺少具体解释。“develop their activities”应改为“develop their skills”或“discover their interests”；“broaden their wills”不符合英语习惯，应使用“broaden their horizons”。此外，“and and”是重复错误。建议补充一个具体例子或结果，使答案更完整，并使用“because”或“For example”增强逻辑。

예시: Yes, I think people should try different activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries both sports and music may find a talent they did not know they had. It can also broaden their horizons and make life more interesting.

× My parents helped me sign up for piano license.

✓ My parents helped me sign up for a piano license.

可数名词“license”前面通常需要限定词。这里使用不定冠词“a”，因为指的是一个钢琴执照。注意：如果你想表达“钢琴课”，更自然的说法是“sign up for piano lessons”。

× When I was a child and I also signed up for money activities in school.

✓ When I was a child, I also signed up for many activities at school.

原句中“When I was a child”已经是时间状语从句，后面不应直接加“and”连接主句。去掉“and”后，句子结构完整。此处“many activities”表示“许多活动”；“money”不能表达“许多”。

× Yes, it can help people develop their activities and and broaden their wills.

✓ Yes, it can help people develop their activities and broaden their wills.

“and”被重复使用了一次。并列两个动词短语“develop”和“broaden”时，只需要使用一个“and”。