Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples. Avoid repeating phrases such as “like example” and use correct verb forms: “we had,” “we acted,” and “we played.” The answer is unfinished, so complete the final idea and use linking words such as “For example” and “In addition.” Keep the response to three or four well-connected sentences.

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, I joined a school drama group, where we acted in plays and performed in front of our classmates. In addition, I took part in different sports and occasionally helped organize school events. These activities helped me become more confident and sociable.

제안: State your opinion clearly at the beginning and explain it with a reason. Replace incorrect expressions such as “not many different things,” “find yourself in a good places,” and “find theirself” with “a few different activities,” “discover what suits them,” and “find something they enjoy.” Use the third-person pronoun consistently: “people should” and “they.” Avoid repeating “places,” and finish the answer with a clear conclusion.

예시: I think people should try several different activities, but they do not need to try everything. Exploring new hobbies can help them discover their interests and identify their strengths. However, once they find something they genuinely enjoy, they can focus on developing that skill instead of constantly looking for something new. For example, someone might try several sports before deciding to concentrate on swimming.

× we have a group in our school to make theatre and play role and we do a lot of sports and we help

✓ We had a group at school where we made theater, played roles, did a lot of sports, and helped others.

The question asks about the student’s childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Change have to had, do to did, and help to helped. Played is also used because it describes an activity that happened in the past.

× play role

✓ played roles

The expression refers to multiple people performing different parts, so the plural noun roles is appropriate. Because the activity happened in the past, play also changes to played.

× until they find yourself in a good places and if they find theirself

✓ until they find themselves in a good place, and if they find themselves

The reflexive pronoun must agree with the subject they. The correct form is themselves, not yourself or theirself. Yourself is used with you, while themselves is used with they.

× in a good places and to go to another places

✓ in a good place and to go to another place

The singular article a must be followed by a singular noun, so places must become place. The word another is also followed by a singular countable noun, so another places must become another place.

× I think not many different things, but some different things until they find yourself in a good places and if they find theirself, it's not a need to go to another places.

✓ I do not think people need to try many different things. They should try some different things until they find themselves in a good place. If they find what suits them, they do not need to try another place.

The original sentence combines several ideas without a clear sentence structure. Separating the ideas into shorter sentences makes the meaning clearer and creates a logical relationship between the conditions and the result.

× I think it's

✓ I think that's enough.

I think it's is incomplete because it's needs a complement to complete the meaning. Adding that's enough creates a complete sentence and clearly expresses the student’s intended conclusion.