Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng và đưa ra chi tiết cụ thể về độ tuổi, nhưng cần sửa thì quá khứ: “have” → “had”, vì sự việc xảy ra khi còn nhỏ. Cụm “go for picnic” nên dùng “go on a picnic”, và “this is my first time” nên đổi thành “it was my first time”. Ngoài ra, “experiencing outdoor activity” chưa tự nhiên; nên nói “taking part in an outdoor activity”. Hãy sắp xếp câu trả lời theo cấu trúc: trả lời trực tiếp → nêu hoạt động → giải thích cảm nhận hoặc kết quả.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was six, I went on a picnic with my class, and it was my first time taking part in an outdoor activity. I really enjoyed exploring nature and spending time with my classmates.

제안: Câu trả lời thể hiện quan điểm rõ ràng và có lý do, nhưng cần viết hoa “Really” và dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn. “It’s providing people” nên đổi thành “they can provide people” hoặc “trying new things can give people”. Cụm “surprising opportunities or changes” hơi gượng; có thể dùng “unexpected opportunities” và “positive changes”. Nên thêm một ví dụ cụ thể để phát triển câu trả lời, đồng thời sử dụng từ nối như “For example” hoặc “As a result”.

예시: Yes, definitely. I think people should try different things because new experiences can open up unexpected opportunities and bring positive changes to their lives. For example, learning a new skill might help someone discover a new interest or even find a career they enjoy.

× Actually yes, when I was six years old, I have an opportunity to go for picnic and this is my first time experiencing outdoor activity with my class.

✓ Actually, yes, when I was six years old, I had an opportunity to go for a picnic, and this was my first time experiencing an outdoor activity with my class.

The answer describes a completed event in the past, so use the past-tense forms had and was instead of the present-tense forms have and is. When describing a past experience, keep the related verbs consistently in the past tense.

× Actually yes, when I was six years old, I have an opportunity to go for picnic and this is my first time experiencing outdoor activity with my class.

✓ Actually, yes, when I was six years old, I had an opportunity to go for a picnic, and this was my first time experiencing an outdoor activity with my class.

The singular countable noun picnic needs the indefinite article a, and the singular countable noun activity needs the indefinite article an. Use a before a consonant sound and an before a vowel sound.

× really yes, I think everyone should try new things as soon as possible because it's providing people with many surprising opportunities or changes in their lives.

✓ Really, yes, I think everyone should try new things as soon as possible because it provides people with many surprising opportunities or changes in their lives.

This sentence expresses a general fact, so use the simple present provides rather than the present continuous form is providing. The simple present is normally used for habits, general truths, and repeated effects.