Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly in the past tense and avoid repeating phrases such as “take part.” Use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific details about the activities, such as the sports or clubs you joined. Correct the grammar: say “I had opportunities,” “my parents supported me,” and “they registered me in a few clubs.” Finish the answer with a complete sentence rather than ending with “I was taking part.”

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents encouraged me to play sports and enrolled me in a local swimming club. I attended training twice a week, and I really enjoyed making new friends there.

제안: Give your opinion clearly at the beginning and develop it with a logical reason and a specific example. Avoid the inaccurate idea that people must be perfect at everything; instead, explain that trying different activities helps people discover their interests and develop useful skills. Improve the grammar and word choice: say “people should try as many things as they can,” “practice makes perfect,” and “they learn more.” Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” and “as a result.”

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young. This is because different experiences help them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries both team sports and music may learn how to cooperate with others as well as become more creative. However, they do not need to be perfect at everything.

× when I was a child I do have opportunity to take part

✓ When I was a child, I had an opportunity to take part

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the past tense is required. Replace do have with had.

× I had opportunity to take part

✓ I had an opportunity to take part

The singular countable noun opportunity needs the indefinite article an because it begins with a vowel sound.

× my parents usually supports me to take part in sports

✓ My parents usually supported me in taking part in sports

The answer describes a past period in the student's childhood, so supports must be changed to the past-tense form supported. Also, supported me in taking part is the more natural verb pattern.

× they have registered me in few of the clubs

✓ They registered me in a few clubs

A few means several and is appropriate for a small positive number. The phrase few of the clubs is not suitable here. Because the event happened in the past, have registered should also be changed to registered.

× and during that time I was taking part

✓ During that time, I took part in those activities.

The original clause is incomplete because it does not clearly state what the student took part in. Complete the sentence with an object, such as those activities. The simple past took part is also more appropriate for a completed past experience.

× you should have tried so many things as they can

✓ You should try as many different things as you can

The question asks for general advice, so should try is more appropriate than should have tried, which usually refers to an action that should already have happened.

× as many things as they can

✓ as many different things as you can

The sentence addresses people directly with you, so the pronoun in the comparison should remain you rather than changing to they.

× not all the particularly one things

✓ not just one particular thing

Particular is the adjective needed to describe thing. Particularly is an adverb and cannot correctly modify thing in this phrase. Because one refers to a singular noun, thing must also be singular.

× practice make human perfect

✓ Practice makes perfect.

Practice is an uncountable singular noun, so it takes the singular verb makes. Practice makes perfect is also the standard English expression.

× you learn things more

✓ you learn more

More should be placed before the verb phrase or used directly after the verb when it means a greater amount. Learn things more is unnatural here; learn more is the correct expression.