Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答有回应问题，但语法和表达不够自然，影响了清晰度。可以改为“my first experience was storytelling”或“I had the opportunity to try storytelling”。注意使用正确的时态和搭配：应说“my first time trying this activity”，而不是“my first time to get in this new activities”；“get in touch with”后面应接人或事物，不能说“get in touch into”。此外，答案中的“the first time”重复，且没有说明具体原因或结果。建议按照“直接回答 + 具体活动 + 原因/感受”的结构组织，并使用“because”或“as a result”连接细节。

예시: Yes. When I was a child, I had the opportunity to try storytelling at school. I really enjoyed creating characters and telling stories to my classmates, so it made me more interested in public speaking.

제안: 观点明确，但存在较多语法和搭配问题，例如“many chance”应为“many chances”，“get a lot of new things”应改为“try or experience new things”，“which you are talented in it”应改为“what you are good at”，而“another self about you”不自然，可改为“discover a different side of yourself”。建议使用更自然的结构：“Yes, because trying different activities helps people discover their interests and strengths. For example, ...”。同时，避免重复使用“you”，并加入一个具体例子或结果，使答案更有说服力。

예시: Yes, definitely, because trying different activities helps people discover their interests and strengths. For example, someone who tries painting, sports, and music may eventually find a talent they did not know they had. It can also help people become more confident and open-minded.

× Yes, I remember is that my first time to get in touch into the storyteller and I was the first time to get in this new activities.

✓ Yes, I remember that it was my first time getting in touch with a storyteller, and it was my first time taking part in these new activities.

“I remember is that”句子结构错误。应使用“remember that + 完整句子”，并在“my first time”前加“it was”。此外，“I was the first time”主语错误，应改为“It was my first time”。

× Yes, I remember is that my first time to get in touch into the storyteller and I was the first time to get in this new activities.

✓ Yes, I remember that it was my first time getting in touch with a storyteller, and it was my first time taking part in these new activities.

“my first time”后面通常接“动词-ing形式”，所以“to get”应改为“getting”，“to get in”应改为“taking part in”。例如：“It was my first time trying something new.”

× Yes, I remember is that my first time to get in touch into the storyteller and I was the first time to get in this new activities.

✓ Yes, I remember that it was my first time getting in touch with a storyteller, and it was my first time taking part in these new activities.

固定搭配是“get in touch with somebody”，不能使用“get in touch into”。表示“参加活动”时，使用“take part in an activity”。

× Yes, I remember is that my first time to get in touch into the storyteller and I was the first time to get in this new activities.

✓ Yes, I remember that it was my first time getting in touch with a storyteller, and it was my first time taking part in these new activities.

“activities”是复数，因此前面的指示词应使用复数形式“these”，不能使用单数形式“this”。如果只指一个活动，应说“this new activity”。

× So I'm very interested in it.

✓ So I was very interested in them.

问题询问的是童年经历，应该使用过去时，所以“I'm”应改为“I was”。由于前文提到的是复数的“activities”，代词也应使用“them”。

× So I'm very interested in it.

✓ So I was very interested in them.

“it”用于指代单数名词或不可数名词，而前文的“activities”是复数，因此应使用复数代词“them”。

× I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chance to get a lot of new things and when you tried it you will know which you are talented in it.

✓ I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chances to try a lot of new things, and when you try them, you will know which ones you are talented at.

“many”后面必须接可数名词复数，因此“many chance”应改为“many chances”。看到“many”时，要检查后面的可数名词是否使用复数形式。

× I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chance to get a lot of new things and when you tried it you will know which you are talented in it.

✓ I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chances to try a lot of new things, and when you try them, you will know which ones you are talented at.

这里使用的是“when + 一般现在时，主句 + will”的结构，表示将来情况。因此“when you tried”应改为“when you try”，不能在这种结构中使用过去时。

× I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chance to get a lot of new things and when you tried it you will know which you are talented in it.

✓ I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chances to try a lot of new things, and when you try them, you will know which ones you are talented at.

表达将来的结果时，主句使用“will know”，而“when”引导的时间从句使用一般现在时“try”。正确结构是“when you try..., you will know...”。

× I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chance to get a lot of new things and when you tried it you will know which you are talented in it.

✓ I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chances to try a lot of new things, and when you try them, you will know which ones you are talented at.

表示“擅长某事”时，常用搭配是“be talented at something”，所以“talented in it”应改为“talented at”。

× I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chance to get a lot of new things and when you tried it you will know which you are talented in it.

✓ I think the answer must be yes, because you have many chances to try a lot of new things, and when you try them, you will know which ones you are talented at.

“a lot of new things”是复数，因此后面不能用单数代词“it”，应使用复数代词“them”。另外，“which ones”可以明确指代前面的多种事物。

× Maybe you will find another self about you.

✓ Maybe you will discover another side of yourself.

当主语和所指的人是同一个人时，应使用反身代词“yourself”，而不是普通代词“you”。“another side of yourself”表示“你自身的另一面”，表达更自然、语法也正确。