Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly in the past tense, then add one specific example. Use “were supportive of me trying” instead of “are supportive of me getting into,” because you are talking about your childhood. Also, “a new instrument” should be singular. A concrete example would make your answer more detailed and effective.

예시: Yes, definitely. My parents were very supportive of me trying new activities when I was a child. For example, they enrolled me in swimming lessons and encouraged me to learn the guitar. As a result, I became more confident and discovered that I really enjoyed music.

제안: Your answer is well organized because you present both sides and use “however” to create contrast. To sound more natural, replace “as many different things as one can introduce them to” with “trying different things can help people discover.” You could also add a specific example or explain how people can avoid becoming distracted, such as trying activities one at a time.

예시: I think people should try a variety of activities, but not all at once. Exploring different hobbies can help them discover their interests and broaden their horizons. However, doing too many things simultaneously may be distracting and leave them without enough time to develop any real skill. For example, they could try one new activity every few months before deciding which ones to continue.

× Yes, I would say so since my parents are generally supportive of me getting into new activities like sports or learning a new instruments.

✓ Yes, I would say so since my parents are generally supportive of me getting into new activities like sports or learning a new instrument.

The singular article a must be followed by a singular countable noun. Therefore, instruments should be changed to instrument. A new instrument is the correct form.

× I do believe that trying as many different things as one can introduce them to different hobbies and broaden their horizons.

✓ I do believe that trying as many different things as one can introduce people to different hobbies and broaden their horizons.

The pronoun them does not have a clear antecedent because no specific people have been mentioned. Use the noun people to make the meaning clear. The pronoun their can correctly refer back to people.