Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Bạn trả lời đúng trọng tâm và đưa ra một ví dụ cụ thể là trại hè bảo vệ môi trường. Tuy nhiên, câu trả lời có quá nhiều từ ngập ngừng như “umm”, bị lặp ý (“I still remember” và “especially I remember”), đồng thời kết thúc dang dở (“Despite being so tired after that I…”). Hãy dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp, mô tả hoạt động, sau đó nêu cảm nhận hoặc kết quả. Chú ý sửa lỗi ngữ pháp “it’s was” thành “it was” và dùng từ tự nhiên hơn như “an environmental camp” thay vì “the school camp protecting the environment”.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was in secondary school, I took part in an environmental camp where my classmates and I cleaned up a local park and planted trees. Although I was quite tired afterward, I found the experience meaningful because it taught me how important it is to protect nature.

제안: Bạn đã đưa ra quan điểm và lý do hợp lý: thử những điều mới có thể giúp mọi người phát hiện sở thích của mình. Tuy nhiên, câu mở đầu sai ngữ pháp (“All I think is depend” nên là “I think it depends”), cách diễn đạt “bump into your interest” chưa tự nhiên, và câu trả lời kết thúc thiếu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy nêu rõ điều kiện hoặc quan điểm ngay từ đầu, dùng từ nối như “However” hoặc “For example”, rồi bổ sung một ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lặp “umm” và thay “give it a try” bằng “try new activities” trong ngữ cảnh trang trọng hơn.

예시: I think people should try a variety of activities, although it depends on their interests and circumstances. By trying new things, they may discover a hobby or talent they did not know they had. For example, someone might join a photography club and realize that they really enjoy taking pictures.

× I still remember when I was in secondary school, especially the school camp protecting the environment.

✓ I still remember a school camp about protecting the environment when I was in secondary school.

The singular countable noun camp needs the article a. The preposition about makes the relationship between the camp and its topic clearer. A more natural word order also improves the sentence.

× It was so meaningful. Despite being so tired after that I.

✓ It was so meaningful. Although I was very tired afterward, I still found the experience worthwhile.

The experience happened in the past, so the past tense was was needed. The original phrase Despite being so tired after that I is incomplete because it does not contain a complete main clause. Although I was very tired afterward, I still found the experience worthwhile is a complete sentence.

× Despite being so tired after that I.

✓ Although I was very tired afterward, I still found the experience worthwhile.

The original sentence is a sentence fragment. The conjunction although must be followed by a complete clause with a subject and a verb. This correction includes I was and a complete main clause.

× All I think is depend on their interests.

✓ I think it all depends on their interests.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure. In the corrected sentence, it is the subject of depends, so the verb must have the third-person singular form depends. The phrase I think it all depends is also the natural way to express this idea.

× I believe that let's give it a try because maybe you can bump into your interest when you do that.

✓ I believe people should give different activities a try because they may discover something they are interested in.

The question refers to people in general, but the original sentence shifts from people to you and your. Using people, they, and they are keeps the pronouns consistent. The phrase bump into your interest is unnatural in this context; discover something they are interested in expresses the intended meaning clearly.

× Yes, or.

✓ Yes, I think people should try different things.

Yes, or is an incomplete and unclear sentence. It does not contain a complete idea. Adding a subject, modal verb, and main verb creates a complete answer to the examiner's question.