Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question more directly by stating whether you had opportunities to try new activities. Avoid repetition such as “we didn't, we didn't” and “be be,” and replace the awkward phrase “it was also a good in a certain way” with a natural expression such as “In some ways, this was beneficial.” Add one or two specific examples of the activities you had to do, and use a linking word to explain their effect.

예시: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities at school, although most of them were compulsory. For example, we had to take part in sports, music, and art classes, so I was exposed to many different subjects. In some ways, this was beneficial because I discovered that I enjoyed playing the piano, even though I might not have chosen it myself.

제안: Give your opinion immediately and then support it with a clear reason and a specific example. The response is relevant and reasonably well developed, but it contains several fillers and repetitions, including “personally,” “umm,” and “I would.” Replace “there is something to be said about” with a more direct expression, such as “However, focusing on one skill can also be valuable.” End with a concise conclusion rather than repeating your opinion.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young. Experimenting helps them discover their interests and develop a wider range of skills. However, once they find something they genuinely enjoy, they should spend enough time on it to make real progress. For example, someone might try several sports before deciding to focus on swimming.

× We didn't have the luxury to choose what we wanted to study, but it was also a good in a certain way that we had to learn every single thing and be be OK or good.

✓ We didn't have the luxury of choosing what we wanted to study, but it was also good in a certain way that we had to learn every single thing and be be OK or good.

The fixed expression is have the luxury of + gerund or noun, not have the luxury to + verb. Use of choosing after of because choosing functions as a gerund. In natural English, you can remember this pattern: have the opportunity of doing something or have the luxury of doing something.

× We didn't have the luxury to choose what we wanted to study, but it was also a good in a certain way that we had to learn every single thing and be be OK or good.

✓ We didn't have the luxury of choosing what we wanted to study, but it was also a good in a certain way that we had to learn every single thing and be be OK or good.

The preposition of is required in the expression have the luxury of doing something. After of, use the -ing form: of choosing. Practise this structure with examples such as I had the luxury of studying abroad.

× We didn't have the luxury to choose what we wanted to study, but it was also a good in a certain way that we had to learn every single thing and be be OK or good.

✓ We didn't have the luxury to choose what we wanted to study, but it was also good in a certain way that we had to learn every single thing and be be OK or good.

Good is used as a subject complement after the linking verb was, so it should not be preceded by the article a when no noun follows it. A good is correct only when good modifies a noun, such as a good experience. Here, say it was also good.