Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변의 핵심 내용은 질문에 직접 답하고 있으며 태권도, 수영, 춤과 같은 구체적인 예도 제시했습니다. 그러나 과거 경험을 말할 때 현재형인 “try” 대신 과거형 “tried”를 사용해야 하며, “give me opportunity”는 “give me opportunities” 또는 “give me the opportunity”로 표현해야 합니다. 또한 “take part a lot activities”는 “take part in many activities”로 고쳐야 합니다. “try try”, “Give me”와 같은 반복과 불필요한 대문자를 피하고, 활동 중 하나를 선택해 어떤 점이 좋았는지 한 문장 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽고 효과적인 답변이 됩니다.

예시: Absolutely. When I was a child, my parents always encouraged me to try new activities, such as taekwondo, swimming, and dancing. I especially enjoyed swimming because it helped me stay healthy and gave me more confidence.

제안: “I think”으로 의견을 분명하게 제시했고, 다양한 경험을 통해 자신의 관심사를 찾을 수 있다는 이유도 적절합니다. 다만 “have to try”는 의무적인 느낌이 강하므로 “should try” 또는 “it is a good idea to try”가 질문과 더 잘 어울립니다. “find what they like”는 “discover their interests”로 바꾸면 어휘가 더 자연스럽고, “it’s very important in their life”는 의미가 모호하므로 “it can help them make better choices in life”처럼 구체적으로 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 마지막으로 새로운 경험의 구체적인 예를 하나 추가하면 답변의 내용과 논리성이 향상됩니다.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young. By doing so, they can discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who tries a team sport may realize that they enjoy working with other people.

× my parents always try to give me an opportunity

✓ my parents always tried to give me an opportunity

Because the student is talking about childhood, the repeated action happened in the past. Therefore, the past-tense form tried should be used instead of the present-tense form try.

× give me opportunity

✓ give me an opportunity

The singular countable noun opportunity needs an article. Use the indefinite article an because opportunity begins with a vowel sound.

× take part a lot activities

✓ take part in a lot of activities

The verb phrase take part must be followed by the preposition in. In addition, the quantifier a lot must be followed by of before a plural noun: a lot of activities.