Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question more directly and use accurate verb forms and collocations. Say “I loved being around people,” not “love to being around the people,” and use “different kinds of characters” instead of “different kind of characters.” You could also reduce repetition by replacing “This is because” with a more natural linking phrase such as “Since.” Add one specific result or feeling to make the answer more complete.

예시: Definitely. Since I was quite outgoing, I took part in several extracurricular activities at school. For example, I joined the drama club, where I enjoyed performing different kinds of characters and expressing myself in front of an audience. It also helped me become more confident.

제안: State your opinion clearly and organize the contrast between the two types of people with linking words such as “whereas” or “on the other hand.” Correct inaccurate word choices and grammar: “monotonious” should be “set in their ways” or “prefer routine,” “divorce activities” should be “different activities,” and “only doesn't like” should be “and do not like.” Avoid the unnatural phrase “get the ability to face the challenges”; use “develop the ability to cope with challenges.”

예시: I think people should try different things, although it depends on their personality. Some people prefer familiar routines and may feel uncomfortable trying new activities, whereas others enjoy taking risks and exploring new experiences. In my opinion, trying new things is beneficial because it helps people develop confidence and cope with challenges.

× For example, I got involved in school drama club and love to being around the people where I can express myself fully by acting different kind of characters.

✓ For example, I got involved in the school drama club and loved being around people with whom I could express myself fully by acting different kinds of characters.

The specific school drama club requires the definite article the because it refers to a particular club. Use the before a singular, specific noun.

× For example, I got involved in school drama club and love to being around the people where I can express myself fully by acting different kind of characters.

✓ For example, I got involved in the school drama club and loved being around people with whom I could express myself fully by acting different kinds of characters.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should consistently use the past tense. Love should therefore become loved.

× For example, I got involved in school drama club and love to being around the people where I can express myself fully by acting different kind of characters.

✓ For example, I got involved in the school drama club and loved being around people with whom I could express myself fully by acting different kinds of characters.

After love, use either the infinitive love to be or the gerund form love being. The combination love to being is incorrect. Because the sentence is about the past, loved being is the appropriate form.

× For example, I got involved in school drama club and love to being around the people where I can express myself fully by acting different kind of characters.

✓ For example, I got involved in the school drama club and loved being around people with whom I could express myself fully by acting different kinds of characters.

Where is used to refer to places, not people. Use a relative pronoun such as whom after the preposition with: people with whom I could express myself.

× For example, I got involved in school drama club and love to being around the people where I can express myself fully by acting different kind of characters.

✓ For example, I got involved in the school drama club and loved being around people with whom I could express myself fully by acting different kinds of characters.

The phrase different kinds refers to more than one type, so kind must be plural. Also, characters is plural, which agrees with the meaning of different kinds.

× They love to enjoy their familiar situations, only doesn't like to do any kind of divorce activities while others tend to do some adventurous activities and so that they can get the ability to face the challenges.

✓ They love enjoying familiar situations and do not like to do any kind of divorce activities, while others tend to do some adventurous activities so that they can develop the ability to face challenges.

The subject they is plural, so the negative auxiliary must be do not, not does not. In the present tense, plural subjects take do not.

× They love to enjoy their familiar situations, only doesn't like to do any kind of divorce activities while others tend to do some adventurous activities and so that they can get the ability to face the challenges.

✓ They love enjoying familiar situations and do not like to do any kind of divorce activities, while others tend to do some adventurous activities so that they can develop the ability to face challenges.

The conjunction and should connect the two actions performed by some people. The unnecessary combination and so that makes the sentence confusing. Use while to contrast the two groups and so that to show purpose.

× They love to enjoy their familiar situations, only doesn't like to do any kind of divorce activities while others tend to do some adventurous activities and so that they can get the ability to face the challenges.

✓ They love enjoying familiar situations and do not like to do any kind of divorce activities, while others tend to do some adventurous activities so that they can develop the ability to face challenges.

Challenges is being used in a general sense, so it does not need the definite article the. Use the challenges only when referring to specific challenges already identified.