Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and give one or two specific details, but avoid fillers such as “actually” and “like.” The phrase “singing and dancing, drawing as well” should be changed to “singing, dancing, and drawing.” Also, “guide my future development” sounds slightly formal and unnatural in this context; “help me discover my interests” is more natural. Link the final idea clearly to the example by explaining which activity you enjoyed most or what you learned from it.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was about four or five, my mother enrolled me in extracurricular classes such as singing, dancing, and drawing. She wanted me to explore my interests, and I particularly enjoyed drawing because I could be creative and learn new skills.

제안: Give your opinion immediately and support it with a clear reason and a specific result. Reduce hesitation and filler words such as “actually,” “you know,” and “’cause,” and avoid the unnatural phrase “time, effort and the opportunities.” Say “the time, energy, and opportunities to try new things” instead. “What-if regrets” is understandable but unnatural; use “regretting missed opportunities” or “wondering what might have happened.”

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever they have the time and opportunity. Exploring different interests can help them discover their strengths and become more confident. Even if they do not enjoy every activity, they are less likely to regret missing valuable opportunities later in life.

× And I do enjoy learning new skills.

✓ And I did enjoy learning new skills.

The question asks about opportunities you had as a child, so the answer should consistently use the past tense. Use did enjoy to refer to your enjoyment during that period. If you mean that you still enjoy learning new skills now, the original present tense is also grammatically acceptable, but it changes the time reference.

× Actually, I think we should because you know, espe, especially when we still have time, effort and the opportunities to do all of that 'cause, you know, just to avoid any what if regrets later on.

✓ Actually, I think we should, especially while we still have the time, effort, and opportunities to do these things, because we want to avoid having any regrets later about what we did not try.

The phrase what if regrets is not a grammatically correct noun phrase, and the original sentence has an unclear structure because the purpose phrase just to avoid any what if regrets is not properly connected to the main idea. Use having any regrets later about what we did not try to express the intended meaning clearly. Also, avoid repeating fillers such as you know and especially when speaking.