Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答抓住了问题，提到了小学期间参加足球和篮球活动，但表达不够自然，且年龄“seven or four years old”含义不清，时态也不一致。可以先直接说明参加过什么活动，再用“because/which”补充原因或收获。注意使用过去时，例如“when I was seven or eight”“my school organized”，并避免重复“some”和“activities”。最后一句应改为完整、自然的表达，如“It was a valuable experience.”

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was about seven or eight. My primary school organized after-school clubs, including football and basketball, and I joined both of them. It was a valuable experience because I learned how to work with my classmates and became more confident.

제안: 观点明确，也给出了结交朋友和改善身心健康两个理由，内容方向很好。但“as they will as they can”应改为“as many as they can”，“In my opinion, I think”重复；“on the other side”不适合这里，建议使用“Furthermore”或“Besides”。注意名词和搭配：应说“people’s physical and mental health”，并将句末问号改为句号。可以加入一个具体例子，使回答更有说服力，同时控制在3—4句话内。

예시: Yes, I think people should try different activities whenever possible. First, they can meet new people and develop friendships outside their usual social circle. In addition, activities such as hiking or team sports can improve both their physical and mental health. For example, joining a sports club can help someone become fitter while also making them feel less stressed.

× Yes, when I was a child about seven or four years old I was in my primary school and in my school we have different department to organize some some class over classes activities like football, basketball as well.

✓ Yes, when I was about seven or four years old, I was in primary school, and my school had different departments that organized extracurricular activities, such as football and basketball.

句子描述的是童年时期的经历，整体时态应使用过去时。因此，表示“有”的现在时 have 应改为过去时 had。

× Yes, when I was a child about seven or four years old I was in my primary school and in my school we have different department to organize some some class over classes activities like football, basketball as well.

✓ Yes, when I was about seven or four years old, I was in primary school, and my school had different departments that organized extracurricular activities, such as football and basketball.

different 后面通常需要接可数名词复数，所以 department 应改为 departments。football 和 basketball 这里属于多个活动，因此用 activities 更合适。

× Yes, when I was a child about seven or four years old I was in my primary school and in my school we have different department to organize some some class over classes activities like football, basketball as well.

✓ Yes, when I was about seven or four years old, I was in primary school, and my school had different departments that organized extracurricular activities, such as football and basketball.

原句中 some some、class over classes activities 的结构不完整且表达混乱。可以使用“departments that organized extracurricular activities”来构成清晰、完整的主句和定语从句。

× So can take part in this activity is a very valuable experience.

✓ So, taking part in these activities was a very valuable experience.

当动词短语作主语时，应使用动名词形式。take part in 应改为 taking part in。由于主语是动名词短语，后面的谓语使用 was。

× So can take part in this activity is a very valuable experience.

✓ So, taking part in these activities was a very valuable experience.

前文提到了足球、篮球等多个活动，所以 activity 应改为复数 activities；指代多个活动时，this 也应改为 these。

× In my opinion, I think people should take part in different activities as they will as they can because through these activities they can meet different people and also they can have some friends with them.

✓ In my opinion, I think people should take part in as many different activities as they can because, through these activities, they can meet different people and also have some friends with them.

表示“尽可能多的活动”时，应使用固定结构 as many + 可数名词复数 + as someone can。因此，as they will as they can 应改为 as many different activities as they can。

× And on the other side, outdoor activities can improve people physical or mental health?

✓ On the other hand, outdoor activities can improve people's physical or mental health.

表示“另一方面”时，英语中通常使用固定连接短语 On the other hand，而不是 on the other side。句首不需要额外使用 And。

× And on the other side, outdoor activities can improve people physical or mental health?

✓ On the other hand, outdoor activities can improve people's physical or mental health.

people 是复数名词，表示“人们的身体或心理健康”时，需要使用复数所有格 people's。不能直接说 people physical health。