Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly using the past tense because you are talking about childhood. Avoid repetition such as “opportunities” and “different things,” and complete your final sentence. Use a clear structure: answer, examples, and a brief result or personal feeling. Also, say “learn about different things” rather than “learn more different things.”

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child, mainly because of my family. For example, I joined the Boy Scouts and played on a basketball team. These activities helped me become more independent and learn how to work with other people.

제안: State your opinion clearly and use the correct expression “as many different things as they can,” not “many different things as they can.” “Explore their eyesight” is incorrect in this context; use “broaden their horizons” or “discover their interests.” Improve grammar by using “I have joined” and avoid unclear phrases such as “become all one person.” Add one specific reason and example, linking them with words such as “because,” “for example,” and “as a result.”

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young. This helps them broaden their horizons and discover what they are good at. For example, joining a sports team can improve both their physical fitness and their ability to cooperate with others.

× Yes, I have got various opportunities to take part in new activities since I was a child because of my family.

✓ Yes, I had various opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because of my family.

The question asks about opportunities during the student's childhood, which is a finished period in the past. Therefore, the past tense had is more appropriate than the present perfect form have got. Using as a child also makes the time reference clearer.

× They have provided many opportunities for me to help me learn more different things.

✓ They provided many opportunities for me to help me learn different things.

The family provided these opportunities during the student's childhood, so the simple past provided is appropriate. The phrase more different things is unnecessarily repetitive; different things or more things is sufficient.

× such as boy scouts, basketball teams and also some

✓ I joined activities such as the Boy Scouts and basketball teams.

The original ending is incomplete and stops after some without stating what the student joined. A complete sentence needs a subject and a verb. The correction finishes the idea with the verb joined.

× Yes, I think people should try many different things as they can to explore their eyesight when they are growing up for me, I have joining different activities because of my family promoting the chances for me so that I can have learned more different things in and in different ways to become all one person.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can to explore their eyesight when they are growing up. In my case, I have joined different activities because of my family, so I can learn more things in different ways and become a well-rounded person.

The original response contains several clauses joined without proper punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Separating the ideas into two sentences makes the structure clearer. The fixed expression is as many different things as they can, and the repeated phrase in and in has been reduced to in.

× I have joining different activities.

✓ I have joined different activities.

The present perfect is formed with have or has plus the past participle. Joined is the past participle of join, whereas joining is the present participle and cannot follow have in this structure.

× so that I can have learned more different things

✓ so that I can learn more things

After the modal verb can, use the base form of the verb. Therefore, can learn is correct. Can have learned is not suitable for expressing the student's intended future result in this context.