Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 어휘 선택에서 오류가 많습니다. 과거완료인 “had took” 대신 단순 과거인 “took part”를 사용하고, “noble activity”는 문맥에 맞는 “novel activity” 또는 “new activity”로 수정해야 합니다. “mad problems”는 자연스럽지 않으므로 “math problems”라고 표현하세요. 또한 마지막 문장의 “before entering primary school”는 봉사활동 시점과 의미가 불분명하므로, 언제 어디서 무엇을 했는지 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 좋습니다. 첫 문장에서 직접 답한 뒤, 봉사활동의 대상과 느낀 점을 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was in primary school, I took part in a volunteering program at a local community center. I helped younger children with their math homework, and it was very rewarding because I enjoyed seeing their progress.

제안: 의미는 전달되지만 부자연스러운 어휘와 문법 오류가 많아 점수가 낮아집니다. “a positive alteration to people” 대신 “beneficial for people” 또는 “a good way to develop as a person”을 사용하세요. “abundant prowess”와 “abandon prowess”는 이 문맥에 적절하지 않으므로 “a wide range of skills”라고 표현해야 합니다. “favourable of being employed” 대신 “more likely to find a job”이 자연스럽습니다. 의견을 먼저 명확히 제시하고, “because”나 “for example”을 사용해 다양한 경험이 주는 구체적인 이점을 설명하세요.

예시: Yes, I think people should try different things because it helps them discover their interests and develop a wider range of skills. For example, someone who tries sports, volunteering, and creative activities may become more confident and adaptable. These qualities can also be useful when looking for a job.

× I had took part in noble activity when I was a pupil.

✓ I had taken part in a noble activity when I was a pupil.

The past perfect tense uses had + the past participle. The past participle of take is taken, not took. For a singular countable noun such as activity, the article a is also required.

× I had took part in noble activity when I was a pupil.

✓ I had taken part in a noble activity when I was a pupil.

Activity is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before noble activity because the activity is not specific.

× As a matter of fact, the current society prefers persons with an abundant prowess.

✓ As a matter of fact, current society prefers people with abundant prowess.

Prowess is normally an uncountable noun, so it should not be used with the article an. Also, society can be used without the definite article when referring to society in general.

× If you have abandon prowess, you might be favourable of being employed.

✓ If you have abundant prowess, you might be more likely to be employed.

The phrase favourable of being employed is not idiomatic for describing employment prospects. Use more likely to be employed instead. In addition, abundant is the appropriate adjective before prowess; abandon is a verb and cannot be used in that position.