Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct and includes a clear reason. However, it is quite long and contains several ideas joined with repeated conjunctions. Use shorter sentences and provide a specific example of an activity you attended. Also, replace the vague phrase “a few basic ones” with a more precise description.

예시: No, I didn’t take part in many activities because my parents wanted me to focus on my studies. However, I occasionally joined school events, such as sports days and art competitions. I enjoyed them, but academics were always my main priority.

제안: Your answer clearly states your opinion and gives two relevant reasons. However, it would be stronger with a supporting example or result. The natural expression is “think outside the box,” not “think out of the box.” You could also qualify the idea by saying that people should try different activities when they have enough time and interest.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them gain experience and think outside the box. For example, someone who tries volunteering, sports, and creative hobbies may discover a new talent or develop useful social skills. However, they should choose activities that genuinely interest them rather than trying everything randomly.