Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly using the past tense because you are talking about childhood. Use “had” instead of “have,” “encouraged” instead of “encourage,” and “joined” instead of “join.” Organize the examples clearly with linking words such as “For example” and “In addition.” Avoid the incomplete phrase “I also joined summer” and specify the activity you took part in. You could also say “a badminton club” and “a craft club” rather than “Craft Badminton club.”

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents always encouraged me to explore different interests. For example, I joined a craft club and a badminton club at school. In the summer, I also took part in swimming lessons, which I really enjoyed.

제안: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well developed, with a direct opinion and several logical reasons. Add a comma after “Definitely,” and use “By trying new things” or “When people try new things” to make the second sentence more natural. “Besides that” is understandable, but “In addition” would sound smoother in this context. You could make the answer slightly more specific by giving a brief example of an activity and its result.

예시: Definitely, I believe people should try as many different things as they can. By doing so, they can discover their interests and develop new talents. In addition, they can learn useful skills and meet new people. For example, someone who joins a cooking class might discover a passion for food while making new friends.

× Yes, I have a lot of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child.

✓ Yes, I had a lot of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child.

The phrase as a child refers to a finished period in the past, so the past-tense form had should be used instead of the present-tense form have. When describing past experiences, use the past tense consistently.

× My parents always encourage me to try new things.

✓ My parents always encouraged me to try new things.

This sentence describes your parents' behavior during your childhood, which is a finished period in the past. Therefore, encouraged is more appropriate than the present-tense form encourage.

× So in school I joined a lot of clubs for example Craft Badminton club and others too and summer I also joined summer

✓ At school, I joined a lot of clubs, such as the Craft Club and the Badminton Club. In the summer, I also took part in summer activities.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains several ideas joined together without a clear structure. Separate the ideas into two complete sentences, use such as to introduce examples, and state the summer activity clearly. Organizing long answers into short, complete sentences will make them easier to understand.