Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本直接，也提供了香港教育环境这一背景和个人经历，但有几处语言不自然或重复： “sports sports”应删除一个；“join the extracurricular activities”前通常不需要the；“joined it”中的it指代不清，可以改为“took part in some of them”或直接说明具体活动。此外，句首“So”应大写，并且可以加入一个具体活动及其结果，使答案更生动、更有细节。建议使用“because/for example/as a result”等连接词，组织成“直接回答＋具体例子”的结构。

예시: Yes, I did. In Hong Kong, children are often encouraged to take part in extracurricular activities, such as sports and music lessons. For example, I learned to play the piano when I was young, and I really enjoyed performing in school concerts.

제안: 回答有明确观点，也使用了钢琴经历来支持观点，但表达较重复且语法不够自然。“I think and I believe”只保留一个即可；“get a lot from new experiences”应改为“gain a lot from new experiences”或“learn a lot from new experiences”；“when I was child”应为“when I was a child”。此外，“I was a good example”不自然，可以改为“My own experience is a good example”。建议减少重复的because，使用“for instance/as a result”连接观点、例子和结果，并控制在三句话左右。

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because they can learn more about themselves and gain valuable experience. For instance, I started learning the piano as a child, and that experience eventually inspired me to become a piano teacher. It shows that trying something new can lead to unexpected opportunities.

× Yes, I did because in Hong Kong every child was encouraged to join the extracurricular activities like playing musical instruments or sports sports.

✓ Yes, I did because in Hong Kong every child was encouraged to join extracurricular activities like playing musical instruments or sports sports.

“extracurricular activities”在这里是泛指课外活动，不需要使用定冠词“the”。只有在谈论特定的课外活动时，才使用“the”。

× So I also joined it when I was a child.

✓ So I also joined them when I was a child.

“activities”是复数名词，因此代词应该使用复数形式“them”，不能使用单数形式“it”。此外，句首的“So”应大写。

× I got to try learning piano when I was child and now I am a piano teacher.

✓ I got to try learning piano when I was a child, and now I am a piano teacher.

“child”是可数名词单数，前面必须使用冠词。这里指“我小时候”，所以应该说“when I was a child”。连接两个完整分句时，逗号可以放在“and”前面。