Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating the idea of “new activities” several times. Use the past tense consistently and replace unclear phrases such as “when a child” and “rock climbing craft” with natural expressions. Add one or two specific details about the activities and explain what you learned or how you felt. Keep the response to three or four connected sentences.

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. When I was around six to eight years old, I went on several school camps where I tried rock climbing and arts and crafts. I really enjoyed rock climbing because it was challenging and helped me become more confident.

제안: State your opinion clearly in the first sentence, then support it with a reason and an example. Avoid confusing phrases such as “depends on person to person,” “doesn't what they want to be stable,” and “excited sighting.” Use linking words such as “however” or “for example” to organize contrasting ideas. You should explain that trying new things can be beneficial, but people should also consider their personality, goals, and need for stability.

예시: I think people should try different things, but not necessarily as many as possible. Trying new activities can help them discover their interests and develop useful skills; for example, someone might find a passion for cooking after joining a short course. However, people who prefer a stable routine may be happier focusing on a few activities they genuinely enjoy.

× when a child

✓ when I was a child

The singular countable noun child needs the indefinite article a. The pronoun I is also needed because the clause describes the student's age.

× maybe they were a lot of school camps

✓ maybe there were a lot of school camps

Use there were to introduce the existence of plural nouns. The noun camps is plural, so the verb must be were, not was.

× when I was six, seven, eight

✓ when I was six, seven, or eight

Use the conjunction or when listing alternative ages. This makes it clear that the student may have been any one of those ages.

× It depends on person to person

✓ It depends on the person

The expression depends on the person requires the article the before the singular noun person. Another natural expression is It varies from person to person.

× I think it depends on person to person that whatever they want to try, doesn't what they want to be stable, trying different new things can be overlooked to some people but for some people it's maybe excited sighting.

✓ I think it depends on the person and on what they want to try. Some people may prefer stability, while others may find trying different things exciting.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use a complete subject and verb in each clause, and connect the ideas with and and while. Separating the ideas into two sentences makes the meaning clear.

× it's maybe excited sighting

✓ it may be exciting

Use the modal verb may followed by be to express possibility. Maybe is an adverb, whereas may be is the correct verb phrase in this structure.

× it's maybe excited sighting

✓ it may be exciting

Use exciting to describe an activity or experience that causes excitement. Excited describes how a person feels, so it is not appropriate for describing trying different things.