Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and use the past tense consistently. Avoid repetitions such as “my school” and complete your final idea. You should also mention one or two specific activities that you could not try and explain why, using linking words such as “because” or “as a result.”

예시: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities when I was at school. My school offered very few extracurricular classes, so I mainly focused on my regular subjects. For example, I would have liked to try drama or swimming, but these activities were not available.

제안: Your answer is clear, natural, and well organized, with an appropriate contrast between different types of people. To make it more effective, add a specific example or a brief result to support your opinion. You could also avoid repeating “it depends” by using a more varied expression such as “this varies according to.”

예시: I think people should try different things, but it depends on their personality and circumstances. Those who enjoy variety can gain new skills and discover interests they never knew they had, while others may be more productive with a stable routine. For example, a university student might benefit from joining different clubs, whereas a busy parent may prefer to focus on one or two activities.

× But no I don't really get enough opportunity to try new things when I was at school my school My school did not have much classes or they do not provide enough opportunities for

✓ No, I didn't really have many opportunities to try new things when I was at school. My school didn't offer many classes or provide enough opportunities.

The question asks about childhood, so the answer should consistently use the past tense. Use didn't have instead of don't get and didn't offer or provide instead of do not provide. Also, the repeated phrase My school and the unfinished ending for should be removed.

× I don't really get enough opportunity to try new things

✓ I didn't really have many opportunities to try new things

Opportunities is plural because the speaker is referring to multiple chances to try new activities. Many is used with plural countable nouns such as opportunities.

× My school did not have much classes

✓ My school didn't offer many classes

Classes is a plural countable noun, so many should be used instead of much. Much is generally used with uncountable nouns, while many is used with plural countable nouns.

× But no I don't really get enough opportunity to try new things when I was at school my school My school did not have much classes or they do not provide enough opportunities for

✓ No, I didn't really have many opportunities to try new things when I was at school. My school didn't offer many classes or provide enough opportunities.

The original answer contains a run-on sentence, a repeated subject, and an incomplete phrase ending in for. Divide the ideas into complete sentences and use parallel verbs: offer and provide.

× I also think that it depends upon our goals and the stage of life you are in.

✓ I also think that it depends upon our goals and the stage of life we are in.

The pronouns should be consistent. Our refers to we, so we are in should be used instead of you are in. Alternatively, the sentence could use your goals and the stage of life you are in.