Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: This is a clear and relevant answer with a direct opening, reasons, and examples. However, use the plural form “opportunities,” and say “helped me make more friends” instead of “helped me build confidence and make friends more.” You could also improve the linking and naturalness by connecting the school clubs and their benefits more smoothly.

예시: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents encouraged me to take up different sports, while my school offered several clubs. For example, I played football and joined a drama club, which helped me become more confident and make new friends.

제안: Your main idea is understandable, but several phrases are unnatural or unclear, such as “to according to them,” “encourage from moving upwards,” and “uplift our daily things.” Use a direct opinion followed by one or two clear reasons. Remember subject–verb agreement: say “it helps” and “it encourages.” Explain that trying different activities can help people discover their interests, develop skills, or become more confident.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, although they do not need to do everything. Trying new things can help them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who joins a sports club might become healthier and more confident.

× Yes, I had plenty of opportunity to take part in new activities as a child because my parents encouraged me to join different sports and my school offered several clubs.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because my parents encouraged me to join different sports and my school offered several clubs.

The noun opportunity is countable in this context. After plenty of, a plural countable noun is needed: plenty of opportunities.

× For example, I played football and took part in drama clubs, which helped me build confidence and make friends more.

✓ For example, I played football and took part in drama clubs, which helped me build confidence and make more friends.

The word more should be placed before the noun friends because the intended meaning is that the student made a greater number of friends. The natural word order is make more friends.

× Yes, people have to try many different things as possible to according to them because it help us to encourage from moving upwards, so it uplift our daily things and it encourage us to do more.

✓ Yes, people should try as many different things as possible because doing so helps them grow, enriches their daily lives, and encourages them to do more.

The phrase to according to them is grammatically incomplete and does not fit the meaning of the sentence. In addition, encourage from moving upwards is not a correct verb structure. A clearer structure is because doing so helps them grow and encourages them to do more.

× because it help us to encourage from moving upwards

✓ because doing so helps us grow

The singular subject it requires the third-person singular verb helps, not help. The phrase help us to encourage from moving upwards is also unnatural, so helps us grow expresses the intended meaning more clearly.

× so it uplift our daily things and it encourage us to do more

✓ so it uplifts our daily lives and encourages us to do more

The singular subject it requires verbs ending in -s in the present tense: uplifts and encourages. Also, daily lives is the natural expression instead of daily things.