Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use the past tense consistently because the question asks about your childhood: say “Yes, I did,” not “Yes, I do.” Improve the grammar in “different kind of activities” and “I had participate” by using “different kinds of activities” and “I participated.” Answer the question directly, then add one specific example and its result. Also, “second candidate” is unclear; say “I came second” or “I won a silver medal.”

예시: Yes, I did. I took part in several activities at school, including a dance programme. I practised with my classmates for several weeks, and we won second place in a school competition. It was a memorable experience because it made me more confident.

제안: State your opinion clearly and avoid repeating “different.” Organise your explanation with a linking word such as “because” or “for example.” Correct the unclear ending by saying that trying new activities can reduce stress and make life more enjoyable. Include one concrete example to make your answer more specific, and keep the answer to two or three clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who joins a sports club may become healthier and make new friends. Trying different things can also reduce stress and make life more enjoyable.

× Yes, I do.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about a childhood experience, so the answer should use the past tense. Use did instead of do when referring to past events.

× I take pride in different kind of activities as a child in my school.

✓ I took part in different kinds of activities as a child at school.

The plural noun activities requires the plural form kinds. Also, took part in is the correct expression for participating in activities, and the past tense is needed because the sentence refers to childhood.

× I had participate in dancing program at my school.

✓ I participated in a dancing program at my school.

The verb participate cannot follow had in its base form. After had, use the past participle participated; however, the simple past participated is more natural for describing a completed childhood activity.

× I had participate in dancing program at my school.

✓ I participated in a dancing program at my school.

A singular countable noun such as program needs an article. Use a because the program is being mentioned for the first time.

× Yes people should try different different things, activities in their life cause life is very beautiful If you want to enjoy and be happy be stressful be reduces stress and all it.

✓ Yes, people should try different things and activities in their lives because life is beautiful. Trying new activities can help people enjoy life, feel happy, and reduce stress.

The original response contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected verb phrases. The corrected version uses complete sentence structures and keeps the advice in the appropriate present-tense form.

× Yes people should try different different things, activities in their life cause life is very beautiful If you want to enjoy and be happy be stressful be reduces stress and all it.

✓ Yes, people should try different things and activities in their lives because life is beautiful. Trying new activities can help people enjoy life, feel happy, and reduce stress.

The plural subject people should be matched with the plural possessive noun lives. Use lives when referring to the lives of multiple people.

× Yes people should try different different things, activities in their life cause life is very beautiful If you want to enjoy and be happy be stressful be reduces stress and all it.

✓ Yes, people should try different things and activities in their lives because life is beautiful. Trying new activities can help people enjoy life, feel happy, and reduce stress.

The response shifts from people and their to the informal pronoun you. Keep the subject consistent by using people, their, and them, or rewrite the sentence without changing the point of view.

× Yes people should try different different things, activities in their life cause life is very beautiful If you want to enjoy and be happy be stressful be reduces stress and all it.

✓ Yes, people should try different things and activities in their lives because life is beautiful. Trying new activities can help people enjoy life, feel happy, and reduce stress.

Cause is not the appropriate conjunction in this context. Use because to introduce the reason. Also, use and to join equivalent activities or benefits.

× Yes people should try different different things, activities in their life cause life is very beautiful If you want to enjoy and be happy be stressful be reduces stress and all it.

✓ Yes, people should try different things and activities in their lives because life is beautiful. Trying new activities can help people enjoy life, feel happy, and reduce stress.

The original response is a run-on sentence containing incomplete phrases such as be stressful and be reduces stress. Divide the ideas into complete sentences, and use a clear subject and verb in each clause.