Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes specific activities, but it is too long and contains an overly complicated sentence with several contrasting ideas. Use a clear topic sentence first, then add one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct “which I have passionately loved” to “which I have loved passionately” or, more naturally, “which I have loved since I was a child.” Also, avoid repeating “painting” and “dancing” unnecessarily.

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child, especially dancing and painting. I loved dancing because it was energetic and fun, but I was not very interested in painting. However, my mother was an excellent painter, so she encouraged me to try it.

제안: Your opinion is clear, but the answer has awkward and repetitive wording. “Gives you an experience of excitement” should be “gives you exciting experiences,” and “makes you feel exciting” should be “makes you feel excited.” Answer the question directly, explain one benefit, and provide a specific example. Do not use a question mark at the end of a statement.

예시: Yes, I think people should try different activities because it helps them discover their interests and strengths. For example, someone might try cooking, photography, or a new sport and eventually find a hobby they really enjoy. It can also make life more interesting and help people develop new skills.

× Personally, I think trying many things in life gives you an experience of excitement and interest to find out what really makes you feel exciting when you experience a particular kind of hobby?

✓ Personally, I think trying many things in life gives you an experience of excitement and interest to find out what really makes you feel excited when you experience a particular kind of hobby.

The adjective exciting describes something that causes excitement, while excited describes how a person feels. Because the subject is you, feel excited is the correct expression. Use -ed adjectives to describe people's feelings and -ing adjectives to describe the things that cause those feelings.