Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly by saying what activities you tried and when. Correct the grammar in “curious everything” to “curious about everything,” and use “tried many different activities” instead of “tried to many different activities.” Also, name clear and relevant activities; “are as good” is unclear. Add one specific result or example to make the answer more developed and natural.

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. I was curious about everything, so I tried badminton, painting, and swimming. For example, playing badminton helped me become more active and taught me how to work with a partner. As a result, I developed new skills and became more confident.

제안: State your opinion clearly at the beginning and avoid repetition, especially “I think I think.” Use “have the opportunity to try new things,” “people should try different activities,” and “develop new skills and hobbies.” Explain one or two benefits with a specific example, but avoid the unnatural phrase “helps our life improve new skills.”

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever they have the opportunity. Trying new things can help them discover hidden talents and develop useful skills. For example, someone who joins a cooking class may discover a passion for food and eventually turn it into a career. However, they should choose activities that suit their interests and schedule.

× Yes, I just tried.

✓ Yes, I tried.

The question asks about activities you took part in as a child, so the simple past tense is appropriate. Just tried usually refers to something that happened very recently.

× I was very curious everything.

✓ I was very curious about everything.

The adjective curious is followed by the preposition about when describing the subject of someone's curiosity. Say curious about something, not curious something.

× So I tried to many different activities.

✓ So I tried many different activities.

Try is directly followed by a noun when it means to participate in or experience something. Try to must be followed by a base verb, as in tried to learn.

× such as Badminton or are as good

✓ such as badminton and other sports

The original phrase is not grammatically complete and does not form a clear parallel list. Use such as before examples and connect similar activities with and or or. Also, badminton is not normally capitalized in the middle of a sentence.

× If other people have opportunity to try to new things

✓ If other people have an opportunity to try new things

The singular countable noun opportunity needs the indefinite article an. The phrase try new things does not require the preposition to.

× I think all people try to different things.

✓ I think everyone should try different things.

Try is directly followed by a noun when referring to activities. Try to must be followed by a verb, not by different things.

× Because it helps our life improve new skills and develop our new hobbies.

✓ Because it helps us develop new skills and discover new hobbies.

The original sentence uses an incorrect structure after helps. Use help someone do something, so helps us develop is grammatical. The verbs develop and discover also create a clear parallel structure.