Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition. Use the natural phrase “take part in” rather than “take participation,” and say “extracurricular activities” without “very.” Correct the grammar in “used to love taking part” and “I got good results in all of them.” Also, use accurate vocabulary such as “quizzes” and “speech contests,” and add one specific example to make the answer more effective.

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. I took part in quizzes, speech contests, and debates at school, and I particularly enjoyed debating because it helped me become more confident. I also achieved good results in several of these activities.

제안: Give a more direct and natural answer by saying “people should try as many different things as possible.” Avoid repeating “different things” and “because.” Explain one or two specific benefits, such as developing skills, discovering interests, or becoming more adaptable. Use a linking word such as “Moreover” or “For example” to organize the supporting detail, and finish with a clear result.

예시: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. Doing so can help them discover their interests and develop a wider range of skills. Moreover, trying new activities can make people more adaptable, which is especially useful in today’s changing world.

× As a child who used to love take participation in very extracurricular activities, I I got the I got many chances to take participation like in quiz, in speeds, in debates and I I used to get very good results in every.

✓ As a child, I used to love taking part in extracurricular activities. I got many chances to participate in quizzes, speeches, and debates, and I used to get very good results in all of them.

After love, use a gerund with the -ing form: love taking, not love take. The phrase take participation is also not the usual verb pattern; use take part in or participate in.

× As a child who used to love take participation in very extracurricular activities, I I got the I got many chances to take participation like in quiz, in speeds, in debates and I I used to get very good results in every.

✓ As a child, I used to love taking part in extracurricular activities. I got many chances to participate in quizzes, speeches, and debates, and I used to get very good results in all of them.

Use participate in an activity or take part in an activity. Do not use take participation like in this context. The preposition in correctly follows participate and take part.

× As a child who used to love take participation in very extracurricular activities, I I got the I got many chances to take participation like in quiz, in speeds, in debates and I I used to get very good results in every.

✓ As a child, I used to love taking part in extracurricular activities. I got many chances to participate in quizzes, speeches, and debates, and I used to get very good results in all of them.

Because the student mentions several activities, use plural nouns: quizzes, speeches, and debates. Also, every must be followed by a singular noun, so all of them is the appropriate expression here.

× As a child who used to love take participation in very extracurricular activities, I I got the I got many chances to take participation like in quiz, in speeds, in debates and I I used to get very good results in every.

✓ As a child, I used to love taking part in various extracurricular activities. I got many chances to participate in quizzes, speeches, and debates, and I used to get very good results in all of them.

Very cannot naturally modify extracurricular in this meaning. Use an adjective such as various or many to describe the activities.

× As a child who used to love take participation in very extracurricular activities, I I got the I got many chances to take participation like in quiz, in speeds, in debates and I I used to get very good results in every.

✓ As a child, I used to love taking part in extracurricular activities. I got many chances to participate in quizzes, speeches, and debates, and I used to get very good results in all of them.

The original answer contains repeated words, an incomplete ending, and several ideas joined in an unclear structure. Divide the response into two complete sentences and use all of them to refer clearly to the activities.

× Yes, I do think people should try different things as they can because it will be beneficial for themselves and in this generation it is essential to learn different things as well because it will make a person capable of doing different things

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because doing so can benefit them. In this generation, learning different skills is essential because it can make people capable of doing different things.

The original answer is a long sentence containing several ideas joined together without clear organization. Separate the ideas into two sentences and use doing so to refer clearly to trying different things. Use people instead of a person when discussing people in general.