Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the first sentence and avoid repeated self-corrections. Use the correct structure “didn’t use to,” and keep the tense consistent by saying “my school offered” and “gave me.” Also, provide one specific example of an activity, such as a sports class or music club, instead of referring vaguely to “many classes.”

예시: Yes, I did, although I didn’t use to go outside very often. My school offered several extracurricular classes, which gave me the chance to try activities like basketball and painting. I especially enjoyed painting because it helped me become more creative.

제안: Give your opinion more smoothly and avoid fillers and repetition such as “it’s a yes,” “some value, some valuable lessons,” and “one spot.” Use the natural phrase “try as many different things as possible,” then support your opinion with a specific example or result. A clear structure would be: opinion, reason, and example.

예시: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. By exploring new activities, they can discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who tries volunteering, sports, or learning a language may find a talent or passion they did not know they had.

× Well when I was a child I didn't used to have used to go outside a lot but in my school they still have many classes but umm that provide me some chances to take part in some activities.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I didn't use to go outside a lot, but my school still had many classes that provided me with chances to take part in activities.

After did not, use the base form use, not the past form used. Because the student is describing childhood, the past tense had and provided is more appropriate than the present-tense forms have and provide.

× So it can be a yes for me.

✓ So it was a yes for me.

The question asks about opportunities during childhood, so the answer should use the past tense was rather than the present-tense form can be.

× Because when you try so many things as you can, you can get some, uh, some value, some valuable lessons and some experience that you cannot have if you just, uh, sit in a, in a spot in a, only one spot.

✓ Because when you try as many different things as you can, you can gain some value, some valuable lessons, and some experience that you cannot gain if you just sit in only one spot.

Use the structure as many ... as you can when referring to a maximum number of countable things. So many ... as you can is not the correct quantifier pattern here.

× Because when you try so many things as you can, you can get some, uh, some value, some valuable lessons and some experience that you cannot have if you just, uh, sit in a, in a spot in a, only one spot.

✓ Because when you try as many different things as you can, you can gain some value, some valuable lessons, and some experience that you cannot gain if you just sit in only one spot.

Do not use the article a before only one spot. The correct phrase is in only one spot. The article a cannot be used together with the word one in this structure.