Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答结构基本清晰，也提供了具体活动和积极影响。但需要注意时态一致：描述童年经历应使用一般过去时，因此“have seen”应改为“watched”或“performed”。“guidesses”不是正确表达，这里应使用“audiences”。此外，“traditional Chinese choreography”表达略不自然，可以说“traditional Chinese dances”或“traditional Chinese dance routines”。建议用“because”或“as a result”连接细节，使逻辑更自然。

예시: Yes. When I was young, I joined a local dance club called Nate Rail Shows, where I regularly learned and performed traditional Chinese dances. As a result, I improved my dancing skills and stage presence, and I became much more confident performing in front of an audience.

제안: 观点明确，并且同时说明了好处和限制，内容较完整。不过句子过长，缺少标点和连接词，建议拆成两句，并使用“However”或“At the same time”连接转折。“overlouding”拼写和用词错误，应改为“overloading themselves”。“spot hidden interests”可以改为更自然的“discover new interests”。最后可加入一个具体例子，使答案更有说服力。

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because they may discover new interests and develop useful skills. However, they should not overload themselves, as doing too much can become stressful and unproductive. For example, a student could try a sport or a musical instrument while still leaving enough time for schoolwork and rest.

× When I was young, I joined a local dance club called Nate Rail Shows. We have seen traditional Chinese choreography regularly.

✓ When I was young, I joined a local dance club called Nate Rail Shows. We regularly watched traditional Chinese choreography.

“When I was young”明确表示过去的时间，因此后面的动作应使用一般过去时。原句使用现在完成时“have seen”，不符合过去时间背景。建议：描述过去发生并已经结束的事情时，使用一般过去时，例如“watched”。

× Absolutely, people should try a broad range of new things to spot hidden interests and pick up fresh skills but they need to stay within their limits and avoid overlouding themselves or it will become stressful and unproductive.

✓ Absolutely, people should try a broad range of new things to spot hidden interests and pick up fresh skills, but they need to stay within their limits and avoid overloading themselves, or it will become stressful and unproductive.

“avoid”后面通常接动名词，即“avoid + 动词-ing形式”。“overlouding”不是正确的英语单词；这里应使用“overloading”，表示“使自己负担过重”。建议记住常见结构“avoid doing something”，例如“avoid overloading yourself”。