Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本回应了问题，也提到了父母和个人选择之间的关系，但表达中有许多语法和用词问题，影响了清晰度。例如，“I got chance”应改为“I got the chance”，“habit license”不是合适的表达，可以说“hobbies”或“activities”；“what are those options were”应改为“the options were”。建议先直接回答“有/没有”，然后说明父母通常帮你选择哪些活动，最后举一个具体例子。尽量减少“uh”等填充词，并使用“however”“although”等连接词使逻辑更连贯。

예시: Yes, I did have some opportunities to try new activities as a child. However, my parents usually chose them for me, such as swimming and drawing lessons. Although I did not have complete freedom, I enjoyed trying different things and eventually became quite interested in drawing.

제안: 观点是明确的，但后半部分句子结构不完整，导致意思难以理解。“Only when...”的倒装结构使用错误，建议改为“People can discover their talents only when they try different activities”；“if a people have a child”应改为“if children try...”或“if a person tries...”。回答可以按照“观点—原因—例子”的结构展开，并使用“for example”“as a result”等连接词。建议提供一个具体例子，例如孩子同时尝试艺术和运动后发现自己更擅长绘画或足球。

예시: Yes, I think people should try a wide range of activities. By doing so, they can discover their interests and identify their strengths. For example, a child who tries both painting and football may realize that they have a natural talent for art. Trying different things can also help people become more confident and open-minded.

× Yeah, unfortunately when I was a child, I got chance to select, uh, habit license that I'm interested in.

✓ Yeah, unfortunately, when I was a child, I got a chance to choose hobbies that I was interested in.

可数名词单数“chance”前面需要使用不定冠词“a”，因此应说“got a chance”。另外，前面使用过去时“was”，后面的兴趣状态也应保持过去时，使用“was interested in”。

× Uh, what are those options were always selected by my parents, but I still got to some, uh, freedom to some extent.

✓ Whatever those options were, they were always selected by my parents, but I still got some freedom to some extent.

原句中“What are those options were”包含两个不正确的结构，不能把“are”和“were”直接连用。这里可以使用“Whatever those options were”表示“无论那些选择是什么”。同时，“get freedom”后面不需要介词“to”，所以应改为“got some freedom”。

× Uh, what are those options were always selected by my parents, but I still got to some, uh, freedom to some extent.

✓ Whatever those options were, they were always selected by my parents, but I still got some freedom to some extent.

“get to some freedom”中的介词“to”使用错误。表达“获得一些自由”时，应该直接说“get some freedom”，而不是“get to some freedom”。

× Only when people try as many activities as possible or they can do their best in finding their talents and their potential is for example, uh, if a people have a child or different activities from art to sports.

✓ Only when people try as many different activities as possible can they do their best to discover their talents and potential. For example, children can try different activities, from art to sports, to discover what they are good at.

以“Only when”开头表示限制条件时，主句通常需要部分倒装，因此应使用“can they”，而不是“they can”。原句还把多个不完整的结构连接在一起，导致句子缺少清晰的主干。将内容拆成两个完整句子后，意思会更清楚。

× For example, uh, if a people have a child or different activities from art to sports.

✓ For example, children can try different activities, from art to sports.

“a people”不能表示“一个孩子”或“孩子们”。“people”通常是复数名词，不能与不定冠词“a”直接搭配。这里根据上下文应使用复数“children”，并搭配复数动词“can try”。

× Only when people try as many activities as possible or they can do their best in finding their talents and their potential is for example, uh, if a people have a child or different activities from art to sports.

✓ Only when people try as many different activities as possible can they do their best to discover their talents and potential.

情态动词“can”后面应接动词原形；“can they do”本身搭配正确。这里的主要问题是“Only when”引导的条件放在句首时，需要将“can”置于主语“they”之前，形成倒装结构。

× Only when people try as many activities as possible or they can do their best in finding their talents and their potential is for example, uh, if a people have a child or different activities from art to sports.

✓ Only when people try as many different activities as possible can they do their best to discover their talents and potential.

原句中的“talents and their potential is”主语和动词搭配不一致。“talents and potential”是并列内容，不能使用单数形式“is”。重组句子后，主句的主语是“they”，因此使用“can they do”来保持主谓一致。