Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question more directly by naming the activity and explaining what the event was. Use the past tense consistently: say “When I was at school” rather than “when I was a child and in school,” and use “on 26 January” for the date. Add one specific detail about your role and how you felt. For example, use “I had the opportunity to…” and link the detail with “because” or “so.”

예시: Yes, I had the opportunity to take part in a school performance when I was a child. It was held on 26 January as part of our Republic Day celebrations, and I performed a short dance with my classmates. I was quite nervous at first, but the experience made me more confident.

제안: Give your opinion clearly, then support it with a reason and a specific example. Correct the subject and noun forms: use “pupils should try different kinds of things,” “their confidence,” and “become more well-rounded people” instead of “become new man.” Avoid switching between singular and plural pronouns. Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” and “as a result” to make the answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, definitely. I think people should try different kinds of activities because this helps them develop confidence and a wider range of skills. For example, someone who joins a sports team may improve their communication and teamwork. As a result, they can become more independent and well-rounded.

× Yes, when I was a child and in school I got a chance to perform on twenty sixth January

✓ Yes, when I was a child and in school, I got a chance to perform on the twenty-sixth of January.

An ordinal date such as twenty-sixth January normally requires the definite article the. The ordinal number should also be hyphenated: twenty-sixth. You can use either on the twenty-sixth of January or on 26 January.

× Yes, absolutely, pupil should try different kind of things so she can develop their confidence, their skills and become new man.

✓ Yes, absolutely, pupils should try different kinds of things so they can develop their confidence and skills and become better people.

Pupils refers to people in general, so it should be plural. After different, use the plural form kinds: different kinds of things. Use plural nouns consistently when discussing people in general.

× Yes, absolutely, pupil should try different kind of things so she can develop their confidence, their skills and become new man.

✓ Yes, absolutely, pupils should try different kinds of things so they can develop their confidence and skills and become better people.

The pronouns she and their do not agree. Because pupils is plural and refers to people generally, use they and their. Avoid switching between singular and plural pronouns in the same sentence.

× Yes, absolutely, pupil should try different kind of things so she can develop their confidence, their skills and become new man.

✓ Yes, absolutely, pupils should try different kinds of things so they can develop their confidence and skills and become better people.

The phrase become new man is missing an article and is also unnatural in this general context. A singular countable noun requires an article, as in become a new man. However, because the subject is plural and the meaning is general, become better people is more natural.