Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question in the past tense because you are talking about your childhood. State the activity clearly, then add a specific detail about when, where, or why you did it. Use natural phrases such as “I had the opportunity to...” and “I sometimes helped...” Also, use the plural noun “farmers” or specify the person you helped. Avoid repeating general words like “activities.”

예시: Yes, I had the opportunity to try some new activities when I was a child. For example, I sometimes helped my grandparents on their farm during the summer holidays. I enjoyed feeding the animals because it was different from my usual school routine.

제안: Begin with a direct opinion and give a clear reason that relates to trying different things. Your example about helping an old man does not clearly illustrate trying different activities, so choose a relevant example, such as learning a skill or joining a new club. Use correct grammar, including “Yes, they should,” “an old man,” and “help him cross the road.” Link your ideas with words such as “because,” “for example,” and “as a result.”

예시: Yes, I think people should try different things because this helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone might join a cooking class and realize that they really enjoy preparing food. As a result, they may gain confidence and even make new friends.

× Yes, I have an opportunity to do activities when I'm a child.

✓ Yes, I had some opportunities to do activities when I was a child.

The question asks about a childhood experience, so the past tense is required. Use had instead of have and was instead of am. Also, opportunities is more natural because the question refers to possible experiences in general.

× I do sometimes to help farmer

✓ I sometimes helped farmers.

The structure do sometimes to help is incorrect. Use the adverb sometimes before the main verb: sometimes helped. The sentence also needs a complete verb phrase.

× I do sometimes to help farmer

✓ I sometimes helped farmers.

Farmer is a singular countable noun and needs an article, or it can be changed to the plural form farmers. Because the student is speaking generally, the plural form is more appropriate.

× Yes they should to help some people in different things.

✓ Yes, they should try different things to help people in different ways.

After the modal verb should, use the base form of the verb without to. Therefore, use should try, not should to help. The revised sentence also directly answers the question about trying different things.

× Yes they should to help some people in different things.

✓ Yes, they should try different things to help people in different ways.

Help people in different things is not the natural preposition and word combination. Use help people in different ways to describe different methods of helping.

× For example, we have a old man trying to cross the road and you help him to cross the road safely

✓ For example, if we see an old man trying to cross the road, we can help him cross it safely.

Use an before a word beginning with a vowel sound, so a old must become an old. The conditional structure if we see also makes this example clearer and more natural.

× For example, we have a old man trying to cross the road and you help him to cross the road safely

✓ For example, if we see an old man trying to cross the road, we can help him cross it safely.

The original sentence shifts from the pronoun we to you without a clear reason. Keeping we throughout makes the subject consistent: if we see an old man, we can help him.