Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and complete your sentence. Avoid using “whereas” because it introduces a contrast that is not expressed here. Use the past tense consistently by saying “went” instead of “go,” and add a specific example or reason to make your answer more developed. Avoid ending with a hesitation such as “um.”

예시: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. I mainly went to school and spent my free time at home because my parents were quite busy. However, I occasionally played football with my classmates after school.

제안: State your opinion naturally with “Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible.” Correct the subject–verb agreement by using “people have” or, more appropriately, “people should.” Avoid the redundant phrase “That’s why because of that,” and use a clear linking expression such as “This is because.” Explain how trying new activities helps people discover their interests and abilities, and include a brief example or result.

예시: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. This is because new experiences help them discover their interests and strengths. For example, someone might try photography as a hobby and realize that they have a real talent for it.

× No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child, whereas I only go to school and um.

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because I only went to school.

The question refers to the student's childhood, so the past tense is required. Use went instead of go because the action happened in the past.

× No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child, whereas I only go to school and um.

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child because I only went to school.

Whereas is used to show a contrast between two ideas, but the second idea explains the reason for the first one. Because is the appropriate conjunction here. Avoid ending the sentence with the filler um.

× Yes, people has to try many different things as they can do.

✓ Yes, people have to try as many different things as they can.

People is a plural subject, so it must be followed by the plural verb have, not has. Also, the correct structure is as many different things as they can.

× Yes, people has to try many different things as they can do.

✓ Yes, people have to try as many different things as they can.

The phrase as many ... as requires the adjective many to come before the plural noun, followed by a second as-clause. The verb do is unnecessary because the meaning is already complete with can.

× That's why because of that they know their skills and their ability.

✓ That is because they can learn about their skills and abilities.

That's why and because of that express a similar linking meaning, so using both together is redundant and creates an incorrect sentence structure. Use one clear connector. In addition, abilities is more parallel with the plural noun skills.