Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答有直接回应问题，也提供了具体年龄和活动例子，但存在较多语法、词汇和表达问题。首先，“5I”应为“When I was five”；“pianos”应改为“playing the piano”；“this activity”应改为“these activities”。其次，“helped me predictions skills”“to help me better improving”表达不自然，应使用“develop my planning skills”或“improve my confidence”。建议用清晰的主题句回答，再说明活动带来的一个具体好处，控制在2—3句，并使用“such as”和“which helped me”等连接结构。

예시: Yes. When I was five, I joined several school clubs, such as swimming, playing the piano, and table tennis. These activities helped me develop my coordination skills and become more confident.

제안: 回答观点明确，也给出了原因和例子，但第二句中有明显的词汇和语法错误。“more different things”应改为“as many different things as possible”或“a variety of activities”；“a broader range of skilled”应为“a broader range of skills”；“mythical instrument”应为“musical instrument”；“improve concentrate concentrations and concrete creativity”应改为“improve concentration and creativity”。另外，结尾的“while trying different job or hobby”不完整且逻辑不清。建议只选择一个具体例子，并用“for instance”连接，避免重复和堆砌不准确的词汇。

예시: Yes, I believe people should try a variety of activities because this helps them develop different skills and discover new interests. For instance, learning a musical instrument can improve concentration and creativity, while trying a new hobby may help people find something they truly enjoy.

× When I was 5I joined several school clubs such as swimming, pianos and table tennis. Taking part in this activity helped me predictions skills and improved my confidence to help me better improving.

✓ When I was 5, I joined several school clubs, such as swimming, piano, and table tennis. Taking part in these activities helped me develop my prediction skills and improve my confidence.

“Several school clubs”表示不止一个活动，因此后文应使用复数“these activities”，不能使用单数“this activity”。另外，“piano”在这里表示钢琴活动或钢琴课，使用单数更合适。

× When I was 5I joined several school clubs such as swimming, pianos and table tennis. Taking part in this activity helped me predictions skills and improved my confidence to help me better improving.

✓ When I was 5, I joined several school clubs, such as swimming, piano, and table tennis. Taking part in these activities helped me develop my prediction skills and improve my confidence.

“help + 宾语”后面通常接动词原形，例如“helped me develop”和“helped me improve”，不能使用“improving”。同时，两个动词“develop”和“improve”应保持平行结构。

× When I was 5I joined several school clubs such as swimming, pianos and table tennis. Taking part in this activity helped me predictions skills and improved my confidence to help me better improving.

✓ When I was 5, I joined several school clubs, such as swimming, piano, and table tennis. Taking part in these activities helped me develop my prediction skills and improve my confidence.

原句中“helped me predictions skills”和“to help me better improving”的结构不完整且搭配错误。应使用“helped me + 动词原形”的结构，如“helped me develop”和“helped me improve”。

× Yes, I think people should try more different things because it helps them develop a broader range of skilled and discover new interests.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it helps them develop a broader range of skills and discover new interests.

本句中“it”指代“people should try as many different things as they can”这一件事，因此使用单数动词“helps”是正确的；这里不需要改成“help”。修改重点是使句子结构与问题中的表达保持一致。

× Yes, I think people should try more different things because it helps them develop a broader range of skilled and discover new interests. For example, learning a mythical instrument can improve concentrate concentrations and concrete creativity while trying different job or hobby.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it helps them develop a broader range of skills and discover new interests. For example, learning an instrument can improve concentration and creativity while trying different jobs or hobbies.

“a broader range of”后面应接可数名词复数，因此“skilled”应改为“skills”。“different”后面列举多个工作或爱好时，应使用复数“jobs or hobbies”。

× Yes, I think people should try more different things because it helps them develop a broader range of skilled and discover new interests. For example, learning a mythical instrument can improve concentrate concentrations and concrete creativity while trying different job or hobby.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it helps them develop a broader range of skills and discover new interests. For example, learning an instrument can improve concentration and creativity while trying different jobs or hobbies.

“instrument”是可数名词单数，前面必须有冠词。因为“instrument”以元音音素开头，所以应使用“an instrument”，而不是直接说“instrument”。

× Yes, I think people should try more different things because it helps them develop a broader range of skilled and discover new interests. For example, learning a mythical instrument can improve concentrate concentrations and concrete creativity while trying different job or hobby.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it helps them develop a broader range of skills and discover new interests. For example, learning an instrument and trying different jobs or hobbies can improve concentration and creativity.

原句中的“concentrate concentrations”和“concrete creativity”结构不正确，且“while trying...”放在句末使句子关系不清。可以把“learning an instrument”和“trying different jobs or hobbies”并列为两个动名词主语，并使用名词“concentration”和“creativity”。

× Yes, I think people should try more different things because it helps them develop a broader range of skilled and discover new interests.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as they can because it helps them develop a broader range of skills and discover new interests.

“more different things”不适合表达“尽可能多地尝试不同的事情”。结合题目中的“as many ... as they can”，应使用“as many different things as they can”。