Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use the past tense consistently: say “Did you have” and “I had,” not “have.” Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain the activity and why it was challenging. Avoid unclear phrases such as “a new activities,” “a four people,” and “one people sold take 100.” Use linking words such as “because” and “so” to connect your ideas, and describe the relay race accurately.

예시: Yes, I had the opportunity to try a new activity when I was a child. I took part in a 400-meter relay race at school, where each of the four runners completed 100 meters. It was challenging because I was not used to running such a long distance, but I really enjoyed the experience.

제안: State your opinion directly and use correct grammar: “People should try” rather than “People trying,” and “like dancing” rather than “like to dancing.” Give one or two specific examples and explain the benefit of trying new activities. Avoid repeating “dance” and replace vague wording such as “if that is better or not” with a clearer result, such as “to find out what they enjoy.”

예시: Yes, definitely. People should try different activities, such as dancing, singing, or playing a sport, because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. Even if they do not enjoy something at first, they may become more confident after giving it a try.

× Yeah, I really have an opportunity to take part in a new activities as a child like in a 400 meter race.

✓ Yeah, I really had an opportunity to take part in a new activity as a child, such as a 400-meter race.

The phrase as a child refers to a past time, so the past-tense form had is needed instead of the present-tense form have. When describing a past experience, use had, experienced, or took part.

× Yeah, I really have an opportunity to take part in a new activities as a child like in a 400 meter race.

✓ Yeah, I really had an opportunity to take part in a new activity as a child, such as a 400-meter race.

The singular article a cannot be used before the plural noun activities. Use a new activity for one activity or new activities without a for more than one activity. Also, use such as to introduce an example more naturally.

× That's because that race is so long race for us.

✓ That was because it was such a long race for us.

The student is explaining a childhood experience, so the verbs should be in the past tense: was instead of is. Use such a long race, not so long race, because such is followed by an adjective and a noun phrase.

× That's because that race is so long race for us.

✓ That was because it was such a long race for us.

When referring to a specific race already mentioned, use the definite article the before race. The sentence also needs only one occurrence of the noun race.

× There is a four people and a one people, one people sold take 100.

✓ There were four people, and each person had to run 100 meters.

Because the sentence describes a past event and refers to more than one person, use there were, not there is. After there were, use a plural noun without the singular article a.

× There is a four people and a one people, one people sold take 100.

✓ There were four people, and each person had to run 100 meters.

Four people is the correct plural form; four peoples is not needed. The singular form is one person, not one people. Use each person when referring to the members individually.

× People trying to some different things as they can like uh, dancing or singing some extra activities.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can, such as dancing or singing as extracurricular activities.

After the modal verb should, use the base form try, not the -ing form trying. After try, use to plus the base verb: try to do something. The phrase as many ... as they can is also needed with countable plural nouns.

× People trying to some different things as they can like uh, dancing or singing some extra activities.

✓ People should try as many different things as they can, such as dancing or singing as extracurricular activities.

The expression as many ... as they can is used with countable plural nouns such as things. Do not say some different things as they can. Use as many different things as they can to express the intended meaning.

× Some people don't like to dancing, but some people like dance.

✓ Some people don't like dancing, but some people like dancing.

After like, use either a gerund with -ing or an infinitive with to. The natural parallel structure here is like dancing in both clauses. Do not combine to with dancing or use like followed directly by the base form dance.

× But you can try that dance if that is better or not.

✓ But you can try dancing to see whether you like it or not.

When presenting two alternatives with or not, use whether ... or not rather than if ... or not in this structure. The phrase to see whether you like it or not clearly expresses the intended meaning.