Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Responde usando el pasado, porque la pregunta se refiere a tu infancia: “I had many opportunities”. Corrige las expresiones poco naturales: “started playing the editor” probablemente debería ser “started playing the piano” o “started editing”, y “began to to dance” debe ser “began dancing” o “began to dance”. Evita dejar la respuesta incompleta y organiza las ideas con una oración principal, seguida de detalles conectados con “Also” o “As a result”.

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. When I was six, I started playing the piano, and at seven, I began taking classical ballet lessons. These activities helped me become more disciplined and confident.

제안: La respuesta expresa claramente tu opinión, pero debes mejorar la estructura y la precisión gramatical. Di “you may not know what you are good at until you try different things” en lugar de “It’s impossible…”. Usa artículos y plurales correctamente: “sports, music, and all kinds of extracurricular activities”. Añade un ejemplo específico y conecta las ideas con “because” o “for example” para que la respuesta sea más natural y efectiva.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because they may not know what they are good at until they experience different things. For example, children can try sports, music, and other extracurricular activities. This can help them discover their talents and develop useful skills.

× Yes, I have a lot of opportunities.

✓ Yes, I had a lot of opportunities.

The question refers to the student’s childhood, which is a finished period in the past. Therefore, use the simple past had instead of the present perfect have.

× At the age of six I started playing the editor and at the age of seven I began to to dance classical ballet.

✓ At the age of six, I started playing the recorder, and at the age of seven, I began dancing classical ballet.

After begin, use either the infinitive begin to dance or the -ing form begin dancing, but do not use to twice. The -ing form is also natural after start. The word recorder is used here because editor is not the name of a musical instrument.

× Both activities they give me the opportunity to

✓ Both activities gave me the opportunity to try new things.

The answer is describing opportunities in the student’s childhood, so the past tense gave is required. The pronoun they is unnecessary because both activities is already the subject. The original sentence is also incomplete, so it needs a complement after to.

× It’s impossible you know in what you have good abilities if you can try it.

✓ You never know what abilities you have unless you try different activities.

The original sentence has an incorrect sentence structure. The natural structure is you never know what abilities you have. Use unless to express the condition that discovering abilities requires trying different activities.

× For a child it’s very important to do sports music and all kind of extra activities.

✓ For a child, it’s very important to do sports, music, and all kinds of extra activities.

Kinds must be plural because the phrase refers to several types of extra activities. Use all kinds of, not all kind of. Commas also separate the items in the list.