Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本切题，也提供了具体年龄和足球经历，但有几处明显的词汇和语法问题：将“rear”改为“rare”并注意其含义；“take part my primary school football team”应改为“take part in my primary school football team”或“join my primary school football team”；“take part in rare activities”表达不自然，可以说“try unusual activities”或“take part in different activities”。建议使用“主旨句+具体例子”的结构，并加入“for example”使细节衔接更清晰。

예시: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, when I was ten, I joined my primary school football team and played matches against several other schools. It was exciting because I made new friends and learned how to work as part of a team.

제안: 观点明确，但后半部分存在重复、语法错误和句子连接问题。“broaden your eyes”不是自然表达，应改为“broaden your horizons”；“can can”需要删除一个“can”；“make you improve your ability”应改为“help you improve your skills”。此外，最后一部分是长句，建议拆分并使用“because”或“For example”连接理由。可以从开阔视野、培养技能和获得新体验等方面展开，但控制在两到三句，避免重复“different things”。

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. This can broaden their horizons and help them develop useful skills. For example, learning a new sport or language can make people more confident and give them valuable experiences.

× Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to take part very rear activities as a child.

✓ Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to take part in very rear activities as a child.

固定搭配是“take part in”，表示“参加……”。“take part”后面通常需要介词“in”再接活动或事件。根据要求，这里只修改介词错误，没有修改“rear”这个词，因为它不属于指定的语法错误类型。

× When I was ten years old, I took part my primary school football team and played against many different teams.

✓ When I was ten years old, I took part in my primary school football team and played against many different teams.

“take part”后面必须使用介词“in”，所以应说“take part in my primary school football team”。建议记住固定搭配“take part in + 活动/团队/比赛”。

× It can not only broaden your eyes but can can make you improve your ability as well people should do different things to have different experiences.

✓ It can not only broaden your eyes but also make you improve your ability. People should do different things to have different experiences.

句中“can can”重复使用了情态动词“can”，属于情态动词使用错误。在“not only...but also...”结构中，前面已经有“can”，后面不需要再次重复“can”。

× It can not only broaden your eyes but can can make you improve your ability as well people should do different things to have different experiences.

✓ It can not only broaden your eyes but also make you improve your ability. People should do different things to have different experiences.

正确的固定结构是“not only...but also...”，不能使用“but can can”。此外，两个完整句子之间不能直接用“as well”连接，因此应在“ability”后结束句子，再开始新的句子。

× It can not only broaden your eyes but can can make you improve your ability as well people should do different things to have different experiences.

✓ It can not only broaden your eyes but also make you improve your ability. People should do different things to have different experiences.

原句把两个完整的句子直接连接在一起，造成句子结构错误。应将其拆分为两个句子：“It can...ability.”和“People should...experiences.”这样句子结构更加清晰。