Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is well organized, relevant, and supported with specific examples. To sound more natural and grammatically accurate, say “gave me those opportunities” instead of “gave me that kind of opportunities,” and keep the past tense consistent by saying “whether I wanted to do it or not.” Also, use articles before instruments: “the guitar, the piano, and the drums.”

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I played basketball and volleyball, and I also learned to play the guitar, the piano, and the drums. My parents often suggested different activities, but they always let me decide whether I wanted to continue with them.

제안: Your response directly answers the question and presents a clear contrast using “However.” The ideas are logical and sufficiently developed. To make the answer more natural and precise, replace “it really provides more opportunities” with “this gives them more opportunities,” and say “focus on a few areas” rather than “narrow their focus.” You could also add a brief example to make your explanation more specific.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a wide range of activities, especially when they are young. This gives them a chance to discover their interests and strengths; for example, someone might try music, sports, and art before finding the activity they truly enjoy. However, once they enter university, they should focus on a few areas so they can prepare more effectively for their future career.

× My parents gave me that kind of opportunities and usually suggested what I might try, but they always let me decide whether I want to do it or not.

✓ My parents gave me that kind of opportunity and usually suggested what I might try, but they always let me decide whether I wanted to do it or not.

The phrase “that kind of” is followed by a singular countable noun, so “opportunities” should be changed to “opportunity.” Also, because the sentence describes a past situation, “want” should be changed to the past tense “wanted” for consistent tense in reported context.

× For instance, I used to play basketball and volleyball and I also played several instruments like guitar, piano and drums.

✓ For instance, I used to play basketball and volleyball, and I also played several instruments like the guitar, the piano, and the drums.

When referring to musical instruments after the verb “play,” English normally uses the definite article “the”: “play the guitar,” “play the piano,” and “play the drums.”