Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời đi đúng trọng tâm và có đưa ra ví dụ về các hoạt động, nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm/nhận diện từ và dùng từ: “Yes, I was a child” nên sửa thành “Yes, when I was a child”; “bambing” có thể là “badminton”; “they have me” nên là “they gave me”; “cafes cafes” không phù hợp ngữ cảnh, có lẽ bạn muốn nói “fun” hoặc “good memories”. Hãy dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng gồm câu trả lời trực tiếp, các hoạt động cụ thể và một lý do hoặc kết quả. Tránh lặp từ “the” và nên dùng từ nối như “because” hoặc “For example” để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: Yes, when I was a child, I had many opportunities to try new activities, such as playing football, badminton, and swimming. I especially enjoyed swimming because it helped me make friends and stay healthy. These activities also gave me some wonderful childhood memories.

제안: Bạn đã nêu quan điểm và cố gắng đưa ra lý do, nhưng câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh về ngữ pháp và có nhiều từ bị dùng sai hoặc khó hiểu. Sau “I think”, cần dùng “people should try”, không phải “people also try”; “new experience” nên là “new experiences”; “helping” nên là “help”; và “discover interest intersect” nên diễn đạt là “discover their interests”. Các ví dụ cuối câu như “shine”, “night painting” và “hugging” không rõ nghĩa; hãy chọn những hoạt động cụ thể như painting, cooking hoặc learning a musical instrument. Nên tổ chức câu trả lời theo trình tự: quan điểm, lý do, rồi một hoặc hai ví dụ minh họa.

예시: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because new experiences help them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For example, someone who tries painting may discover a talent for art, while learning to cook can make them more independent. Trying different things can also help people become more confident.

× Yes, I was a child I had many opportunities to take part in activities such as football, bambing and swimming.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I had many opportunities to take part in activities such as football, badminton, and swimming.

The sentence contains two independent clauses joined without a suitable conjunction or punctuation. Use When I was a child to introduce the time clause, and separate it from the main clause with a comma. Also, badminton is the correct spelling of the activity.

× I enjoyed the them because they have me my friends and cafes cafes.

✓ I enjoyed them because they gave me opportunities to spend time with my friends at cafés.

The pronoun them cannot be preceded by the article the. Use them alone because it refers to the activities. The phrase my friends and cafes is incomplete, so opportunities to spend time with my friends at cafés makes the meaning grammatically clear.

× I enjoyed the them because they have me my friends and cafes cafes.

✓ I enjoyed them because they gave me opportunities to spend time with my friends at cafés.

The answer describes childhood experiences, so the past tense is required. Replace have with gave because the activities provided these opportunities in the past.

× Personally, I think people also try as many different things as they can because new experience, helping them discover interest intersect and develop skills for instance shine different hobbies, night painting or hugging are huge.

✓ Personally, I think people should try as many different things as they can because new experiences help them discover their interests and develop skills.

The question asks whether people should try different things, so should is needed to express advice or recommendation. Also, the adverb also is unnecessary in this answer unless it refers to a previous idea.

× because new experience, helping them discover interest intersect and develop skills

✓ because new experiences help them discover their interests and develop skills

Experiences and interests are countable nouns used in a general sense, so they should be plural. The plural subject experiences also correctly matches the plural meaning of the sentence.

× new experience, helping them discover interest intersect and develop skills

✓ new experiences help them discover their interests and develop skills

Helping cannot function correctly as the main verb after the subject new experiences in this sentence. Use the base verb help after the plural subject. The structure help someone do something is correct, so discover remains in the base form.

× new experience, helping them discover interest intersect and develop skills for instance shine different hobbies, night painting or hugging are huge.

✓ New experiences help them discover their interests and develop skills. For instance, trying different hobbies, such as painting or hugging, can be beneficial.

The original sentence joins several ideas without clear linking words or punctuation. Use because to introduce the reason, and use For instance to introduce an example. Separate the explanation and the example into two sentences.

× new experience, helping them discover interest intersect and develop skills for instance shine different hobbies, night painting or hugging are huge.

✓ New experiences help them discover their interests and develop skills. For instance, trying different hobbies, such as painting or hugging, can be beneficial.

The original sentence has an unclear subject, an incorrect verb form, and several ideas joined together without proper punctuation. Organize it into a complete sentence with the subject New experiences and the verb help, followed by a separate example sentence.