Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on clear, direct response with correct grammar and concise details. Begin with a topic sentence saying whether you had opportunities, then give one or two specific reasons or brief examples. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and incorrect forms (singular/plural, articles). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and keep the answer within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I did not have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My family was not wealthy, so I attended a local public school that offered few extracurricular programs. As a result, I mainly practiced simple games at home rather than joining organized clubs.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with two concise, specific reasons using linking words (because, for example, so). Correct countable/uncountable forms and reduce repetition. Use vocabulary relevant to learning and skills and finish with a short consequence or example.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it broadens their perspective and helps them develop a range of practical skills. For example, learning sports can improve teamwork and fitness, while trying a new hobby like coding can boost problem-solving abilities. As a result, people become more adaptable in work and life.

× To be honest, I did not have a tip, uh, opportunity to take part in new activity as a child because when I was young, my parent is not really a wealthy family.

✓ To be honest, I did not have the opportunity to take part in new activities as a child because when I was young, my parents were not really wealthy.

Errors: 'a tip' is irrelevant and likely a speech filler; 'new activity' should be plural 'new activities' to match general plural meaning; 'my parent is not really a wealthy family' mixes singular/plural and tense. Use past tense 'were' for a past situation and plural 'parents'. Suggestion: Remove filler, use plural for general activities, and use past tense with correct subject-verb agreement: 'my parents were not really wealthy.' Grammar issue IDs: 5 (Past tense issue), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors).

× They cannot offer me into a International School, so my school is.

✓ They could not send me to an international school, so I attended a local public school.

Errors: 'offer me into a International School' is ungrammatical; 'into' and 'offer' are incorrect verbs/prepositions here and 'a International' should use 'an' before vowel sound; sentence fragment 'so my school is.' lacks completion. Use past modal 'could not' for inability in the past. Suggestion: Rephrase to a complete past-tense clause: 'They could not send me to an international school, so I attended a local public school.' Grammar issue IDs: 26 (Sentence structure errors), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions), 22 (Article errors), 5 (Past tense issue).

× Well, I would say yes, because everyone should try many different thing as much as they can, because the more you learn, the more what you experience, you gain and you will gain different perspective, uh, in the world and you have a lot of skill, uh, not just, uh, at school tech, but uh.

✓ Well, I would say yes, because everyone should try as many different things as they can. The more you learn and experience, the more you gain, and you will develop different perspectives in the world and many skills, not just academic ones.

Errors: 'many different thing' should be 'as many different things' (quantifier and plural); 'the more what you experience' is ungrammatical — remove 'what' and link with 'and experience'; 'different perspective' should be plural 'different perspectives'; 'a lot of skill' should be 'many skills' or 'a lot of skills'; 'at school tech' is unclear and likely wrong phrase — use 'academic ones' or 'school-related skills'. Also tense consistency: use present modal 'should' and future 'will' appropriately. Suggestion: Use correct quantifiers, plural nouns, remove extraneous words, and split into clearer sentences for fluency. Grammar issue IDs: 6 (Present tense issue), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 14 (Incorrect use of quantifiers), 26 (Sentence structure errors)