Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and complete your sentence with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and grammar (e.g., past simple) and avoid filler words. Link ideas with a short connector if needed.

예시: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my school organized clubs such as painting and chess, so I joined the art club and learned basic drawing techniques. These activities helped me discover my interests and make new friends.

제안: State your opinion clearly, then give two concise reasons with examples. Use linking words (for example, because, and) and correct subject-verb agreement. Keep sentences short and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, people should try different things because it helps them learn new skills and discover interests. For example, joining a dance class can improve fitness and confidence, and trying a language course can make travel easier and broaden job opportunities.

× Yeah, lots of activities I have had when I was a child most probably it regarded as part of school activities like

✓ Yes, I had lots of activities when I was a child; most of them were probably school activities, such as ...

The original sentence mixes present perfect ('have had') with a specific past time ('when I was a child'), which is incorrect. Use simple past 'I had' for actions completed in a finished past period. Also 'it regarded as' is incorrect passive/word choice; use 'most of them were probably school activities.' Improve sentence flow by splitting into clauses and using a phrase like 'such as' to introduce examples. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past events and correct passive to 'were' + noun phrase. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Of course people try many things as they can, including like some of the people wear likes to study or doing the extracurricular activities like dancing, singing or any other is up to the people.

✓ Of course people should try as many things as they can, including studying or doing extracurricular activities such as dancing or singing; it depends on the person.

Multiple issues: the clause 'try many things as they can' needs 'as many things as they can' and a modal 'should' is more natural to express recommendation (Modal verb usage overlaps, but primary issue is present tense/modal choice). 'Including like some of the people wear likes to study' is ungrammatical: 'including studying' or 'including activities such as studying' is correct. 'Doing the extracurricular activities' should be 'doing extracurricular activities.' 'Any other is up to the people' should be 'it depends on the person' or 'it is up to the individual.' Use base verb forms after 'including' (noun/gerund), and maintain subject-verb agreement and natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'should try' to recommend, use gerunds for activities, and replace awkward phrases with 'it depends on the person.' Grammar problem type ID:6