Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Use clear grammar and concise wording. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and correct articles, plurals and word choice (e.g. "a few opportunities", "parish" vs "Paris" or "a trip"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail (e.g. "because","so").

예시: Yes, I had a few opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my school selected excellent students to go on a cultural trip to Paris, so I joined that trip to learn about art and history.

제안: Give a clear opinion in the topic sentence and support it with one specific reason and an example. Correct grammar (plural forms, articles) and use linking words (e.g. "because", "for example") to make the answer coherent. Keep it natural and avoid repeating the same phrase.

예시: Yes, people should try many different things because it helps them discover skills and interests. For example, by joining clubs or volunteering, students can gain practical experience that may open up career opportunities in the future.

× I have got an few opportunity as a child.

✓ I had a few opportunities as a child.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('have got') with a past time reference ('as a child') and uses incorrect article 'an' before 'few' and singular 'opportunity' where plural is needed. Use simple past 'had' for past situations, 'a few' (no 'an') and plural 'opportunities'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense and correct quantifier: 'I had a few opportunities as a child.'

× During our school days, there was opportunity to go to parish as a excellent student.

✓ During our school days, there was an opportunity to go to Paris as an excellent student.

Missing article 'an' before 'opportunity' and 'an' before 'excellent'. 'Parish' is likely a misspelling of the city 'Paris' or wrong noun; context suggests 'Paris'. 'There was' is acceptable for past existence, but articles and proper noun spelling must be correct. Suggestion: Use 'there was an opportunity' and 'an excellent student' and correct proper noun: 'Paris'.

× I took that opportunity, I grabbed that opportunity and I went to the Paris as Action student.

✓ I took that opportunity, I grabbed it, and I went to Paris as an exchange student.

Redundant repetition 'that opportunity' can be replaced by pronoun 'it'. 'the Paris' is incorrect: city names usually have no article. 'Action student' is unclear; likely 'exchange student'. Also need 'an' before a singular noun starting with a vowel sound ('exchange student'). Suggestion: Replace repetition with 'it', drop 'the' before city names, and use the correct noun 'exchange student' with article 'an'.

× Yes, the students should try many different thing and they should get experience of lot of different things.

✓ Yes, students should try many different things and they should gain experience of a lot of different activities.

'The students' is too specific; general statements use zero article 'students'. 'thing' should be plural 'things'. 'Get experience of lot of different things' needs 'gain experience of a lot of different activities' for natural phrasing and requires articles: 'a lot of'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns, correct articles, and more natural verbs: 'students should try many different things and should gain experience of a lot of different activities.'

× It is their time so they can experience different thing and which will give them some opportunity in future.

✓ It is their time, so they can experience different things, which will give them some opportunities in the future.

Pronoun and clause issues: 'which' should refer to the whole preceding clause and not start a new independent clause; add comma before 'which'. 'thing' should be plural 'things'. 'some opportunity' should be plural 'some opportunities' or 'an opportunity'. Add article 'the' before 'future' when specifying 'in the future'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns, correct relative clause punctuation, and add 'the' before 'future': '...experience different things, which will give them some opportunities in the future.'