Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense for childhood, reduce hesitations, add one or two specific activities and a brief reason or result using linking words. For example, say: “Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For instance, I took football lessons and art classes, which helped me develop teamwork and creativity.”

예시: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. For example, I took football lessons and art classes, which helped me develop teamwork and creativity.

제안: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use present simple for general statements, avoid vague phrases like “more things.” Explain a concrete benefit or example to make the answer convincing. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think people should try many different things because life is about gaining experience. For instance, trying new hobbies or jobs can teach useful skills and help you discover what you enjoy.

× I have uh, many opportunity in my child maybe to take course from uh, football or uh, uh, doing the art and painting, but uh, I go to the study and thinking.

✓ I had many opportunities in my childhood, maybe taking courses in football or doing art and painting, but I went to school and studied.

Errors: 'many opportunity' should be plural 'many opportunities' (singular/plural issue). 'my child' is incorrect word choice; use 'my childhood' (incorrect use of nouns). 'to take course' should be 'taking courses' to match plural and gerund form (singular/plural and verb+ -ing). 'from football' is wrong preposition; use 'in football' (incorrect use of prepositions). 'I go to the study and thinking' mixes tenses and word forms; change to past tense 'I went to school and studied' to match the past context (past tense issue) and use correct verbs. Suggestion: use consistent past tense when speaking about childhood, pluralize countable nouns, use 'in' for activities and 'childhood' for the period of life.

× Yes, of course because the life it's about experience.

✓ Yes, of course, because life is about experience.

Errors: 'the life' incorrectly uses the definite article; use 'life' without 'the' (article error). 'it's about experience' is acceptable but 'life is about experience' is more natural and aligns with present simple (present tense issue). Suggestion: use present simple for general truths and omit unnecessary articles before uncountable abstract nouns like 'life'.

× So we had different things to learn more things.

✓ So we tried different things to learn more.

Errors: awkward and repetitive structure 'had different things to learn more things' (sentence structure error). 'Had' is past tense but doesn't convey trying activities; use 'tried' or 'did' to show participation. Remove redundant 'things' and end with 'learn more' (clearer and grammatically correct). Suggestion: simplify sentences, avoid repetition, and choose verbs that reflect the intended action (e.g., 'tried different things to learn more').