Opportunities— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and coherence: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'for example' or 'also') and correct grammar (past tense and proper verbs). Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Avoid unfinished thoughts and repetition.

예시: Yes. I had many opportunities to join new activities in my neighborhood. For example, I joined a community soccer team and a weekend art class, which helped me make friends and learn new skills. Also, participating in these activities boosted my confidence and taught me how to work with others.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words like 'because', 'for example', and 'also'. Fix repetition and awkward phrases; use natural collocations (e.g., 'try different activities', 'learn new skills', 'meet people'). Keep response to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think people should try different activities because it helps them learn new skills and discover interests. For example, trying cooking classes taught me how to be more creative, and joining a volunteer group helped me meet supportive people.

× As a child I was very active I would take a lot of activities in a lot of community places.

✓ As a child, I was very active; I took part in many activities at various community centers.

The original sentence runs clauses together without proper punctuation and uses 'take a lot of activities' incorrectly. This is a sentence structure error: combine clauses correctly and use the appropriate verb phrase 'take part in' or 'participate in' instead of 'take' activities. Also replace 'a lot of' with 'many' and 'community places' with 'community centers' for clarity. Add commas and combine with a semicolon to show the related independent clauses.

× I really enjoyed taking the new activities and execute them and they convince the people taking the people to

✓ I really enjoyed trying new activities and putting them into practice, and I found that they convinced other people to join.

The original sentence misuses verb forms: 'taking the new activities' should be 'trying new activities' (gerund usage with correct verb), and 'execute them' is awkward — use 'putting them into practice' or 'carrying them out.' The phrase 'they convince the people taking the people to' is ungrammatical; revise to 'they convinced other people to join.' This fixes incorrect verb forms and clarifies meaning.

× I would suggest people to take as many different things as they can because when you participate in many activities You can learn, you can you can have people to be with you, to learn something out of faith.

✓ I would suggest that people try as many different activities as they can, because when you participate in many activities, you can learn, meet others, and gain new experiences.

The original contains incorrect modal/verb structures: 'suggest people to take' is incorrect — 'suggest that people try' or 'suggest people try' is correct. Also 'you can you can have people to be with you' is ungrammatical; use 'meet others' or 'make friends.' 'Learn something out of faith' is unclear; 'gain new experiences' fits better. Fix modal/suggestion structure and remove repetition and awkward infinitive usage.